Lin Lane Poet Haiku

Inside a Japanese Garden: With Added Note

cherry blossoms fall
confetti cast to the wind
tumbling to the ground

orange koi swimming
summer rain upon the pond
lotus of soft blush

bamboo whispering
their voices sing at twilight
serenade the moon

fire fades from the sun
low upon the horizon
bowing to the sea
rays of light shimmering gold
sunset crosses the threshold

***I posted this series of Japanese writings at the request of Dale Cozart. He saw the beauty of nature through these simple words on another poetry site. I thank you, Dale, and the many of you who now see it, too. It was entered in a contest, but the judge thought it lacked 'punch,' and called it "insipid." 

A Nipponnet is comprised of three Haiku and a Tanka

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Jay Narain June 28, 2024 at 9:19 AM Beautiful poem. I am getting inspired to write one on the Japanese garden. Lin Lane June 28, 2024 at 9:28 AM You went wayyy back for this one, Jay. I'd love to read your poetry on such a garden.

Connie Marcum Wong July 12, 2018 at 3:41 PM I'm positive I commented on this lovely Nipponnet Lin. I don't see my comment anywhere. This is just stunning Lin! Congratulations on POTD! I remember commenting that it was really an insult to say this was insipid. It is anything but! : ) Lin Lane July 12, 2018 at 5:48 PM Yes, you did, Connie, but your comment jumped onto John Hamilton's potd the next day. Thanks ever so much for the kind words, sweet friend.

FJ Thomas July 10, 2018 at 1:49 PM Your yard in paradise Lin lol? This is a lovely garland of haiku! Lin Lane July 10, 2018 at 2:01 PM This one would pale in comparison to one in the New System. Thanks very much for the visit and compliments, Flo.

Casarah Nance July 10, 2018 at 9:38 AM I think it is truly pure and beautiful, I could read it over and over again and feel the nature in it. Lin Lane July 10, 2018 at 9:48 AM Hi, Cas, and thank you for enjoying this one. I'm pleased you felt what I tried to convey.

Jan Allison July 10, 2018 at 7:53 AM Your additional comment made me smile Lin... i will say no more about contests lol:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane July 10, 2018 at 8:04 AM Oh, I'd have plenty more to say, but since I will no longer take part in contests, I shouldn't. But that doesn't mean I don't see flaws with things such as same word rhymes, misspellings, etc. that were overlooked in the judging.

John Lawless July 9, 2018 at 6:34 PM sounds more like the chagrin of a democrat saying "you didn't write that"...a very gentle, calming trio of haiku Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 6:42 PM haha John. I'll not be drawn into a political debate. The elephant and the donkey need not suffer at the hands of politicians...and neither will they from my pen. Records stand or fall on their own merit. Thanks so much for liking these Haiku and Tanka. I'm pleased to hear from you.

Virginia Waters July 9, 2018 at 6:03 PM back to congrat for POTD. peaceful and gentle describes a garden to soothe - I wouldn't expect it to 'punch'. and gentle and calm isn't the same as insipid. Have you ever seen the monet garden at seki city. so gorgeous - have a video post of it. Often watch - almost hypnotic pastels - also not insipid- so so subtle. Lovealways - V Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 6:40 PM Thank you, Virginia. Your thoughts mirror my own in that Haiku should be soothing...not filled with punch. I appreciate your kind comments immensely..

Arturo Michael July 9, 2018 at 2:11 PM Congratulation Lin...Its beautiful ... Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 2:29 PM Thank you very much, Arturo.

Daniel Turner July 9, 2018 at 1:48 PM Congratulations Lin on POTD. It's quite obvious that judge should be defrocked! Probably a republican. lol Really nice write, Lin:) Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 2:29 PM lol at your defrocking the judge. She's one of the 'old biddy' types. You know the kind, wrinkly like a Republican elephant. Thanks a lot for the kudos, Danny.

Anne-Lise Andresen July 9, 2018 at 12:49 PM - A wonderful beautiful garden, Lin - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 1:06 PM Many thanks for your well wishes, Anne-Lise.

Sunlite Wanter July 9, 2018 at 9:55 AM Gorgeous poetry. Poor judge who couldn't enfold its beauty. Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 12:07 PM Thank you so very kindly, Sun. I happy to read your note.

Winged Warrior July 9, 2018 at 9:52 AM Beautifully described Laney...I was almost there...Congrats!!! on your POTD!...and kudos to Mr. Cozart...love and light...^WW^ Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 10:20 AM hey there, my WW. Kudos indeed for Dale. I'm delighted to read your sweet words. Thanks ever so.

Dale Gregory Cozart July 9, 2018 at 9:44 AM Congrats on POTD, Lin! Beautiful verse. Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 10:19 AM Thanks for asking me to post this one, Dale, and for the kindness as well as your words of recognition.

Alexis Y. July 9, 2018 at 9:26 AM Hi Lin, This is just beautiful. Congratulations on getting the poem of day. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 10:18 AM Hi, Alexis. Your sweet regards and so welcome.

Agnes Krampe July 9, 2018 at 9:14 AM Lovely imagery, Lin. Congrats on POTD! Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 10:18 AM Thank you, Agnes. It's nice to hear from you.

Warren Doll July 9, 2018 at 8:54 AM Wonderful and beautiful images. Congratulations on POTD, Lin. Well done. Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 10:17 AM Thank you for the kind compliments, Warren.

Mike Gentile July 9, 2018 at 7:44 AM Congratulations Lin, Exquisite poetry xxoo Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 7:53 AM and thank you, Mike, for such a kind description. It's greatly valued.

Roy Pett July 9, 2018 at 7:20 AM Congratulations on your well deserved POTD Lin, I love your Haiku but I think your Tanka is exceptional, beautifully written. :)) Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 7:41 AM ahhh, Roy. I agree with you. The last line of my Tanka is my favorite. Thank you so kindly for such sweet remarks.

Tim Smith July 9, 2018 at 5:53 AM Big congratulations Lin, some great haiku Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 7:39 AM Arigatou gozaimasu...thank you very much, Tim.

Faraz Ajmal July 9, 2018 at 5:35 AM Such a lovely poem this is, full of imagery, it has certainly created some of the most pleasant pictures in my mind, I really enjoyed reading it, many congratulations on your poem being chosen as POTD Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 7:37 AM I appreciate each of your wonderful thoughts, Faraz. Thank you very much.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart July 9, 2018 at 5:07 AM A serene garden scene, lovely done Lin! Congratulations on potd :) xomo! Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 7:37 AM Many thanks for your kind thoughts, Mo.

Tom Cunningham July 9, 2018 at 3:10 AM There is nothing more beautiful than a Japanese water garden and you've captured its beauty so well in your poem Lin. Congratulations on POTD honours. Tom. Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 7:35 AM It's such a peaceful place to meditate. Thank you very much for your well wishes, Tom.

Jan Allison July 9, 2018 at 2:42 AM many many congrats on POTD lin! ;-) hugs Jan Lin Lane July 9, 2018 at 7:34 AM G'morning, Jan, and thank you for the heads up. Hugging ya back, chick.

Lyric Man July 8, 2018 at 12:43 PM Lin, wow.. so skilled in your beautiful mind. I love every line. This is what poetry should be. You make me smile! Lin Lane July 8, 2018 at 12:48 PM I appreciate your charming thoughts, Dave. Everything in nature inspires me, as I'm sure they do for you.

Tim Smith July 8, 2018 at 6:40 AM Nice to see beauty in it's proper state. Not many adhere to the rules of traditional form...brava Lin Lin Lane July 8, 2018 at 7:32 AM What a lovely comment, dear Tim. Thank you ~ very much.

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