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inner inferno hiku

kohl eyed crust   e r   
                            u    p 
                                  t s 
like molten 
                  t r 
                 e m 
                      o 
                        r   s     of  heart ~ 
   inner  inferno

earthhaiku

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Duke Beaufort

May 3, 2025 at 10:07 AM

IE, this is very interesting to contemplate. When the kohl-eyed crust erupts, the structure of the poem does literally flow downhill. I'm wondering if it includes tears of sadness as well as heart-felt pain. I'm thinking of all the times I've felt hurt and then anger at not getting what I wanted in terms of affection or recognition. That is a very painful thing to experience, and it did lead to difficulty coping with daily life. I'm really glad those days of eruptions are over. Fortunately, there is a way to think about it all and not let what happened in the past interfere with the present. It takes a lot of thought to get to that point and being able to focus on being kind to others. I hope you are in a good state and wish to send a smile. Cheers!!

Sara Kendrick

May 1, 2025 at 9:25 AM

Creative work. I hope that a volcano doesn't erupt and spread molten lava but now that molten chocolate cake can be a wonderful treat. Reads like a winner if for a contest. Way to go. Sara K

Yann Rolland

May 1, 2025 at 3:27 AM

great sensitivity, and emotional haiku, enjoyed

Joseph P. DiMino

April 30, 2025 at 7:09 AM

Reminds me of my Pompeii days. Reincarnated memory. God willing, no loss of life -- stuff can be replaced. May have a winner here, outrageously well done!

Paige Hind

April 29, 2025 at 9:31 PM

Wow. I love your haikus, yours are the best. <3

Andrea Dietrich

April 29, 2025 at 4:14 PM

Oh my. It took me a while to figure out the word "erupts" haha. It's so great how stylistically you do these. I need to get one up quick

Lioness Onpaper

April 29, 2025 at 12:04 PM

Oooo erupting molten lava cake !!!! But kohl!!! Love it!!! For some reason um thinking dark dark dark ooozing chocolate molten lava cake now!!!!

Lin Lane

April 29, 2025 at 11:55 AM

It looks all downhill from here. Not your Hiku, that imminent eruption. ;-)

Ink Empress

May 1, 2025 at 7:55 AM

Haha dear linnersz, thank you also for suggesting " eyed" i appreciate your kind support, you are an amazin poetess painter proofreader all the P's! So grateful