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Inhale - Exhale

a breeze exhales its aim time then inhales our frame 10~10~2014 Maurice Yvonne Sponsor: nette onclaud Contest Name: IN ITS ESSENCE

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Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/19/2014 12:03:00 PM

intriguingly cryptic, Maurice.. uniquely done!.. thanks for making my contest a special one.. congrats!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/15/2014 4:06:00 PM

yours was very imaginative, Maurice. BIG congrats, I saw yours first of them all and am seeing it last as I leave the winners' list. now time to get home FAST.

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 10/15/2014 12:56:00 PM

A great one from a great mind; congrats Maurice.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/15/2014 11:56:00 AM

Congratulations on yet another worthy win, Maurice. // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/15/2014 11:51:00 AM

Nicely expressed thought, Maurice, congrats

Jan Allison

Date: 10/15/2014 10:08:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Maurice :-) hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/15/2014 8:20:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Maurice. I like this one (more)

Tim Smith

Date: 10/15/2014 8:20:00 AM

Congrats brother.... Cheers Tim

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/11/2014 3:15:00 PM

That's from my perspective ..Of course : )

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 3:25:00 PM

From my perspective I like your perspective.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/11/2014 3:13:00 PM

Definitely a lot of essence in these two lines.They explain someone'release from past pains..And the clock tick tocks another hour and with it freedom.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 3:22:00 PM

Dead on Char.

Tim Smith

Date: 10/11/2014 11:34:00 AM

Can you explain the form :).....well captured

Tim Smith
Date: 10/11/2014 3:27:00 PM

That's what the girls said yesterday

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 3:25:00 PM

Sorry Tim I didn't mean to jump you

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 3:15:00 PM

Amen, Carolyn.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/11/2014 12:07:00 PM

duh..gee Tennessee...those comments made me laugh

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 12:05:00 PM

Obviously not.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/11/2014 10:55:00 AM

Dear Maurice, There is magic to be found in the darkness. A tiny candle is more than enough light. Perhaps some clocks are like lamps. I don't know the contest rules, but this is a very cool couplet! Wishing you success, my friend. Love, Carolyn

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 3:23:00 PM

Amen Carolyn.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/11/2014 7:01:00 AM

The Essence, created by Emily Romano is a short, structured form of two-lines, six syllables each with an end rhyme and internal rhyme. This is written for nette onclaud's contest that is based on writing a two line poem with the theme of time.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 8:03:00 AM

Thanks Maurice I couldn't have put it better myself:-) Hugs jan xxx

Jan Allison

Date: 10/11/2014 2:51:00 AM

Great poem Maurice - its a tough challenge and you nailed it:-) Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 12:06:00 PM

It's about a bear.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 8:01:00 AM

I am not sure it is Jan but thank you for your support.

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen

Date: 10/11/2014 1:24:00 AM

All right....a fine way of telling a thing.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 8:00:00 AM

thank you kind sir.

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/10/2014 11:39:00 PM

Terse, enigmatic words in this work! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/11/2014 7:58:00 AM

Great comment Matthew.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/10/2014 10:16:00 PM

hmmmm, is there a picture involved with this one? I had no idea Nette had a new contest up. You really have my curiosity with this one. Gotta go see what the contest is!!!

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/10/2014 10:17:00 PM

It's essence form.