Infernal Flame

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I have been working on the ottava rima format.

Ottava Rima

The Ottava Rima is a unique and captivating form of poetry composed of eight eleven-syllable lines with an a-b-a-b-a-b-c-c rhyme scheme. It was developed by Tuscan poets in the late thirteenth and early fourteenth centuries.

Here is another ditty inspired by Emile Pinet.

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Infernal Flame Beneath the gothic arches, his gaze held fast, In candlelit chambers, their desires impure, Whispers like velvet, dark seduction amassed, Her raven hair beckons, with sinful allure, Blood-red roses fell, memories of lovers past, In shadowed embrace, their dark tale would occur, A forbidden love, born from infernal fire, A raging passion of unbridled desire.

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Kayla Herriford

Date: 9/12/2024 6:24:00 AM

Very breezy and romantic poem great in it depth

Ink Empress

Date: 6/30/2024 2:22:00 PM

Always love reading a poem on forbidden love, something about them truly is poetic and i love your wordplay here, i see your love for dark poetry through your diction! And i really love the lines “ Blood-red roses fell, memories of lovers past, In shadowed embrace, their dark tale would occur, ” brilliant! Blood red roses! Thats intense! And rhymes here is just creative and you did the form well from what i see! Pleasure reading this poetically soulful write

Edward Wraith
Date: 6/30/2024 8:16:00 PM

Appreciate the love Empress!! You are too kind.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 6/29/2024 6:49:00 PM

It sounds terrific to me. I like the story line and the intricate rhyme.

Edward Wraith
Date: 6/29/2024 7:00:00 PM

Thank you Hilda. The Ottava rima format has proven to be quite challenging and rewarding. I greatly appreciate your kind words and support. Thank you