Inevitable Shock

Symmetrical sunlight slips into the room that was once overflowing with gloom
Exposing my flaw…though the rubbish of knowing doesn't seem to change you…
Instead, you grow like a bolt of lightning, descending down to the ocean blue

I think for a moment…how much time do we have left together?
I found you in my dreams, though where will you depart? 
Saying goodbye never was this hard, but I must do it with all my heart

And the pain comes from this rubbish called knowing
Knowing that our separation will never affect your violent rays
Vanish from my sight, you cruel wicked maze!

Heroic soldiers, saints, drive away this disaster possessing my sight
Put a bolt on my door, and a bite of spirit on my threshold
For major seas connect, and one lightning bolt is bold

I need you now…though how can I touch such clean translucency? 
 I wait for you on the shores of accumulated filth
Where waters pass on the disease I have spoiled you with

I don’t know why you plague my mind with your indifference
Running your spotless hands over my infested mind
I found you in my dreams, I found you in my dreams unkind 

Delinquents, villains, they master my vulnerable state
But they never know me as you do to the full
This is beyond my control…you are one unpredictable soul


- A special collaboration with my brother David :} -

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 4/19/2015 1:13:00 AM
Powerful emotive write, Laura. You've always been able to say what's in your heart and mind ins such a telling and fluid fashion. A 7. Hugs! Kim. PS. Sorry for being remiss, but I have more time to read and comment now. :)
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/19/2015 1:52:00 AM
Hello Kim! That's perfectly okay; completely understand! I really appreciate your visits. You are always very encouraging. I will be visiting your page soon. Thanks so much! Hugs~Laura
Date: 4/18/2015 7:06:00 AM
A Dynamic Duo!!!! This one is a keeper, dear Laura! Huggsies (oh and your brother David too!) xxxx
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Date: 4/18/2015 6:33:00 PM
Jack, thank you for visiting my page - your sweetness is much appreciated by both of us. Thrilled to have shared it with you. ~Laura
Date: 4/17/2015 6:07:00 AM
Only the poet can get away with this vivid cogitation of two correlating pneumas in thrust. Indeed, the title to this ponderous write fit perfectly dear poet ! Have a wonderful week Laura.....much love, james
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Date: 4/17/2015 6:28:00 AM
Hey James!! Nice to have you over here again! I'm about to head to bed, but I'll have to get on your page when I return and read some more of your work. Thanks for your feedback and your kind words! You rock! ~Laura
Date: 4/17/2015 3:01:00 AM
I like how you write your lines and your stanzas. I like the whole poem. 7+!
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Date: 4/17/2015 4:58:00 AM
Many thanks, Hannington!! ~Laura
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