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July 6, 2023 ~ Writing Challenge ~ I Words. Sponsored by Constance La France

I've learned there can be thunder without lightning and rain And that a hailstorm of admissions can cause sorrow and pain But there was never a moment of indifference in my emotions Doubt me if you will, but my heart was steadfast in devotions I must take the blame for many things I wish I had not done but being nonchalant about our relationship was never one For falling deeply in love with you, I was totally unprepared Yet, by the time I realized that it was happening... I dared The restless waves that crash as they wash upon my shore were born from ripples of the past that left me wanting more I drowned when your love became a raging river inside of me Does that confession sound like I thought of you with apathy? Despair would fill every crevice of my being and I'd be fraught if you thought I was passive, and my mind would be wrought I have only my tarnished words that I can offer you as proof Please believe that my feelings were never ambivalent or aloof

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Constance La France

Date: 7/21/2023 10:17:00 AM

Lin, beautiful poem and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge I Words !

Lin Lane
Date: 7/21/2023 10:24:00 AM

Thanks, Constance. ;-)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/7/2023 1:04:00 AM

- Back with a congratulations, Lin :) - hugs

Lin Lane
Date: 7/21/2023 10:24:00 AM

Thank you.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 7/6/2023 11:07:00 AM

Lin, a well expressed, heartfelt poem, sometimes love has more chances if both parties agree to it.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2023 12:31:00 PM

Thank you, Tania. In the telling of a tale, it is the truth that must be told.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/6/2023 10:48:00 AM

- This poem tells me that once upon a time there was a man and a woman who met and fell deeply in love...but it wasn't enough...heartbreaking...lovely written, Lin - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2023 10:53:00 AM

Once upon a time, Anne-Lise, but not all fairytales have a happy ending. Thank you for your well wishes.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/6/2023 4:18:00 AM

WONDERFUL. I just love this and have felt so much in your writing... beautifully done. Heartfelt and definitely not indifferent! God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina

Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2023 7:05:00 AM

I'm thankful for your kind thoughts, Gina.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/6/2023 4:09:00 AM

Such a heartfelt piece Lin,deep sorrow etched into every line , a poem sadly many can relate to when a relationship doesn't work out for whatever reason:-( hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2023 7:04:00 AM

"It was the best of times, it was the worst of times... Thank you very much for the depth of your insight, Jan.