Beautiful Scars Poet Sedoka

In Your Loss I'Ve Lost Myself

Chances were taken
    In your loss I've lost myself
        I still choke on your regret
Crisscross not straightened
    Stop hiding under my shelf
        You carried so much neglect

~Written By: Laura Loo~
   ~Date Written: February 9, 2016~

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White Sage February 12, 2016 at 10:46 AM well penned sedoka Laura, the theme's perfectly done

Funom Makama February 11, 2016 at 9:06 AM A wonder and a bliss, your lines have given my heart a kiss and I am glad on your page, I did not suffer a miss. An outright 7 dear colleague Beautiful Scars February 11, 2016 at 10:58 AM Thank you Funom :)-luloo

Robert Lindley February 10, 2016 at 10:47 PM When in love , a loss can end the world and bring in utter darkness. I am not familiar with tis form but your poem speaks well and the message rings loud and clear. A7 Beautiful Scars February 11, 2016 at 10:57 AM Robert, thank you very much for your kind comments :) *Smiles* -luloo

Katie Bugnacki February 10, 2016 at 9:58 PM This is sad to me. Did a loved one pass away? Sorry for your loss. Prayers! KB Beautiful Scars February 11, 2016 at 10:57 AM Thank you for the prayers KB! I appreciate you popping in and reading my poems. Be blessed! *smiles* -luloo

Jan Allison February 9, 2016 at 5:41 PM sad sedoka LuLoo must try this form you have inspired me:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx7 Beautiful Scars February 9, 2016 at 6:45 PM Sedoka is one of my fav forms..and I love when they rhyme too-luloo

Lin Lane February 9, 2016 at 4:27 PM There's a tightrope to walk in that kind of circumstance. I almost lost myself that way, trying to save someone else. Good sedoka, Laura. Beautiful Scars February 9, 2016 at 6:44 PM thank you Lin...-luloo

Andrea Dietrich February 9, 2016 at 3:56 PM This is sad and I like that second line a lot and this kind of theme you chose to do. Beautiful Scars February 9, 2016 at 3:58 PM Thank you sweet Andrea :) -luloo