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4 Lines from Any Song Contest       January 11, 2024

Sponsored by Joseph May

In Too Deep

You're too deep in, you can't get out
Of a river of emotions,
and you're drowning without a doubt,
holding on to love's devotions.

Tragic, when your whole world is black.
You're too deep in, you can't get out.
Memories hurt when they flashback.
Is this what heartache's all about?

Thirsting for love, but there's a drought.
Anguish is your gut reaction.
You're too deep in, you can't get out
and can't get no satisfaction.

You cry, "Look at me, I'm shattered!"
With anger and regret you shout,
"Love was everything that mattered!"
You're too deep in, you can't get out.

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You're too deep in, you can't get out ~ Rolling Stones * Emotional Rescue

When your whole world is black ~  Rolling Stones * Paint it Black

Can't get no satisfaction ~ Rolling Stones * Satisfaction

Look at me, I'm shattered ~ Rolling Stones * Shattered

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Joseph May February 11, 2024 at 4:43 AM "Emotions overflow when heartache comes", Very nicely done Lin, Congrats on your win Lin Lane February 11, 2024 at 8:35 AM Morning, and thank you very much for finding a place on your list for my poem, Joseph. I'm grateful.

Tania Kitchin January 11, 2024 at 4:10 PM Lin, a great poem, very clever and creative and I enjoyed your reference to the Rolling Stones, brilliant! Lin Lane January 12, 2024 at 8:28 AM Thank you so very much, Tania.

John Lawless January 11, 2024 at 1:17 PM Nice take on the contest theme Lin, Lin Lane January 12, 2024 at 8:28 AM Thank you very much, John.

David Kavanagh January 11, 2024 at 12:39 PM Some great lines here Lin, and a wonderful compilation of Stones songs, you make them fit together quite seamlessly, I think you will get some satisfaction from this one, cheers David Lin Lane January 12, 2024 at 8:27 AM lol David. I already have based on the comments. That's a win for me. Thanks a bunch.

Daniel Turner January 11, 2024 at 12:20 PM Great job, Lin. Very creative! Great band also. Good luck! Lin Lane January 12, 2024 at 8:27 AM Thanks a lot, Danny. I was sure you'd appreciate it with your love of music.

Jan Allison January 11, 2024 at 11:14 AM oh golly gosh Lin I got a lot of satisfaction reading this gem, you wove the lines in so wonderfully - shame i cant get any satisfaction with my fickle muse - wrote 5 poopy poems for next book but as for serious my muse says noooo noooo nooo:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane January 12, 2024 at 8:26 AM I'm glad you liked it Jan. I thought this would be a contest that needed a LOT of thinking, but I started with 'Satisfaction' and it seemed to all fall into place. Thanks, Chick.

Sotto Poet January 11, 2024 at 10:43 AM Lin, your poem explores the experience of being consumed by intense emotions, particularly the negative aspects of love such as heartache, regret, and longing. It delves into the feeling of being unable to break free from the grip of these emotions and the impact it has on the individual. Well composed my friend. Lin Lane January 12, 2024 at 8:25 AM Thanks, Lasaad. You've covered every emotion planted in these lines. "What's love got to do with it?" asked Tina... everything.

Paula Goldsmith January 11, 2024 at 9:27 AM A creative write. Good job with the songs. Good Luck... Have Blessed day writing away....................... Lin Lane January 11, 2024 at 9:32 AM Paula, thank you for the many kind comments you offer my poetry.