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Pick-A-Title, Vol 45- Poetry Contest
sponsored by Edward Ibeh hms 08/08/24

will the world vanish when I die ~ or just to those who opened their eyes said the blind man touching his braille mirror ~ sensing a life he despised

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Lin Lane

Date: 8/11/2024 3:39:00 AM

I read your reply to Dilly and thought, ‘senses reflected in a mirror. ‘ what a unique concept… a Braille mirror that when touched will expose emotions.. possibly allowing one to hear others words or even thoughts? Ok I’m delving into The Twilight Zone. I think the world will vanish to me when I die, hopefully not forever, but that’s a whole nother playing field. You DO lead my mind to far off places.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/11/2024 6:15:00 AM

I've been down a few, David. Not all of my own choosing but eventually I resurface.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/11/2024 6:00:00 AM

Heya Lin for sure Dilly and myself tend to view the world in an abstract light, sometimes it really makes a lot more sense that way, the Braille mirror concept is just another way of examining different dimensions that cannot be seen by our human eye, but still very real nonetheless, sorry to lead you down the rabbit hole, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/8/2024 7:40:00 AM

I don't suppose he'd ever know living in darkness and many sighted ones living in darkness wouldn't know either. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/8/2024 8:48:00 AM

Heya Tom, indeed another way of looking at this one, many sighted people live in darkness because they can’t see past themselves, or won’t even try, maybe that’s what the blind man despises so much, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/8/2024 7:34:00 AM

I'm saddened David. "The Braille Mirror" an actual magazine, King James Version of the Bible! I could've hit & ran this one by commenting 'great ku's xo' but instead I learned something! ;)

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/8/2024 9:07:00 AM

The braille mirror struck me sad the way it was used.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/8/2024 8:43:00 AM

I never even heard of a braille mirror so took a chance with that one Anaya, nothing really to be sad about here (or perhaps there is) depending on interpretation, I always like to layer up my monokus with metaphor and extra dimensions, cheers David

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/8/2024 7:07:00 AM

Great images! With your first monoku I think of my reaction to my mom’s death…I thought has she ever been here. Oh how the heart can’t make sense of such things and merely learns where to place it.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/8/2024 8:36:00 AM

Beautiful words Kim, trying to make sense of death at a basic human level can be devastatingly impossible, and can overload our senses with all sorts of emotions even hatred, this one is all metaphorical of course, I was quite surprised by the many different interpretations it can evoke, sorry about your Mom Kim, cheers David

Jan Allison

Date: 8/8/2024 6:46:00 AM

you are the master of monoku David ! hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/8/2024 8:13:00 AM

Heya Jan, they can say so much in one line alone, but with two lines the possibilities are endless, cheers David