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If you think I have posted this before, I have. This is the first edit of that version. I've made its syllabic
format more in line with the Battle Hymn and edited some of the verses to better say what I wanted to say. I don't know if I'm through or not. Please offer any comments you feel like giving after you have read this. Also submit any ideas you may have for extra stanzas; not that I don't have quite a few already. Remember, opinions don't matter unless they are given for consideration. These are the times to be involved. I have left the original preface for my attempt, so I can maintain some kind of history for my own reference

The Battle Hymn of the Republic was the rallying song for the United States of America during the Civil War. It was written and published the first time in February 1862; shortly after the war began.  

I woke up this morning, about 4:00 AM with the Battle Hymn on my mind and thought I would try to write words pertaining to our war on the Coronavirus, to be sung to the tune of the Battle Hymn of the Republic. I have been working on it for almost five hours and would appreciate your comments on my attempt.

I hope I haven't diminished the seriousness of the original words with the humor, I have used at times, in this attempt.

Here are the words to the Battle Hymn of the Republic
Just go to your browser to find versions played by all the Armed Forces Band and Choirs
You won't regret it; very touching

Lyrics
Mine eyes have seen the glory of the coming of the Lord;
He is trampling out the vintage where the grapes of wrath are stored;
He hath loosed the fateful lightning of His terrible swift sword;
His truth is marching on.
Glory! Glory! Hallelujah!
Glory! Glory! Hallelujah!
Glory! Glory! Hallelujah!
His truth is marching on.
I have seen Him in the watch-fires of a hundred circling camps;
They have builded Him an altar in the evening dews and damps;
I can read His righteous sentence by the dim and flaring lamps,
His day is marching on.
I have read His fiery gospel writ in rows of burnished steel!
"As ye deal with my condemners, so with you My grace shall deal!
Let the Hero, born of woman, crush the serpent with his heel, "
Since God is marching on.
He has sounded forth the trumpet that shall never call retreat;
He is sifting out the hearts of men before His judgment seat;
Oh, be swift, my soul, to answer Him; be jubilant, my feet!
Our God is marching on.
In the beauty of the lilies Christ was born across the sea,
With a glory in His bosom that transfigures you and me;
As He died to make men holy, let us die to make men free!
While God is marching on.

God helps us through everything, we only have ask and believe

 

In the Far Off Land of China (To the tune of the Battle Hymn of the Republic) Edit 1 By Franklin Price 03/28/2020 In the Far off land of China many thousand miles away The Coronavirus came to its first human on that day Was ever more contagious as it traveled on it's way Its dangers not yet done If two hundred years ago, would have stayed across the sea Not have flown around the world, to have come for you and me Delivered to us overnight, was this Virus we can't see It spreads across the land Chorus Coronavirus is among us If we unite it won't defeat us In its course it may deplete us Let's strive to make it few The President has led the way, through this whole entire thing Though the left and media, have called him a ding-a ling He's tries to do what's best for us, gives us hope for which to cling It was not here before He shut down all the borders, sent the non-essentials home Organized a varied task force, to address this virus gnome Through it all his hair looks good, never saw a brush or comb It has not gotten him Chorus Stocks were at their very highest, then this virus came along The rich began their dumping, gave not a damn about the throng Could have shown a little caring, profit taking then was wrong Gains for three years are gone Unemployment was its lowest, than it was for many years The economy was booming, lots of smiles not many tears Then coronavirus came, lay offs have brought on fears Now we must persevere Chorus Each of us must join the fight, in the best way that we can Must sequester in our houses, not be with our fellow man Since it spreads by social closeness, we now have a travel ban The virus marches on Wash your hands and do it often, while you sing the birthday song Don't touch your face or shake a hand, as you daily move along Keep your distance when you're passing, being safe is never wrong To slow this virus down Chorus The medical community, puts their lives out on the line Saving ours by risking theirs, could be even yours and mine We must fight this thing together, we'll overcome it and be fine That's what we all must do Others of us are required, to supply all with our need Policemen and utilities, those for our mouths to feed The Farmers, truckers, grocers, are required, yes indeed Their jobs make them exposed Chorus Millions of us have been laid off, and we're not allowed to work Not needed for essentials, we're an economic perk It is coronavirus, not employer, that's the jerk The bills must still be paid The Hill without much wisdom, knew that Covid was at fault Passed a bill that helps the people, and they opened up the vault Money now, to aid the workers, brings starvation to a halt They finally did some good Chorus We've now been in a quarantine, a couple weeks and more The deaths and cases growing, just in case you're keeping score Be patient for a little while, don't venture out your bolted door We'll shut this virus down You may be getting crazy, from this isolation stir The data's being analyzed, to get us back to where we were To get us back to work again, sometime soon that should occur There must be safety first Chorus It's all about the attitude, that gets us through this virus plight Did not ask for this war with it, now it's here, must fight the fight Do whatever's asked of us, as we travel to the light Together we will win

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




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