In the Absence of Moonlight

In the Absence of Moonlight

A serenade he had prepared
A love song of desire
Her to the moon he had compared
They’d meet within the hour

But oh, dear moon ,where have you gone?
My song will sound so sour
I pray your presence won’t be long 
We meet within the hour

A little re-write here and there
She’s now a gorgeous flower
No time had he, for despair
They meet within the hour

Her ears are filled with serenade
Her heart, it feels the power
Pleased was he, with changes made
And more so for that hour.


For Andrea’s One in Three Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 11/13/2013 2:03:00 PM
Had to read this one again to relive the absolute beauty of every line....Has a very English feel to it....Lovely....
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Date: 8/13/2013 8:54:00 PM
Very nicely done I enjoyed this romantic piece! Best wishes in the contest ! Laura :)
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Date: 8/11/2013 1:52:00 PM
Ahhh!! Romantic winning work that has great rhythm, rhyme, flow and poetic quality..Congrats..Sara
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/11/2013 3:59:00 PM
Thank you fo this comment Sara, very nice of you, much appreciated
Date: 8/11/2013 7:52:00 AM
Good morning Richard, I hope you have a wonderful Sunday.
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/11/2013 3:55:00 PM
Tis evening I found this Rick, but has been a good day, thank you, hope yours was as nice
Date: 8/10/2013 7:40:00 PM
love it Richard ,,,,, congratulations on a very nice win ;}
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/11/2013 3:54:00 PM
Thank you Debbie, appreciate your visit, will be round to look see yours soon
Date: 8/9/2013 7:47:00 PM
nice winning poem...SKAT
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/11/2013 3:42:00 PM
Thank you Skat, nice to see you again
Date: 8/9/2013 9:05:00 AM
lovely write Richard....I love how he had to do the rewrite...I guess he would compare her to the stars....congrats on your win
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/11/2013 3:38:00 PM
Thank you Joseph, there are times we need to rethink our moves
Date: 8/9/2013 6:20:00 AM
You may or may not have the girl but for sure you have a win. Congratulations neighbor.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/1/2013 11:21:00 AM
YES IT DOES SOUND AWFUL! GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/11/2013 3:32:00 PM
We both have a win Rick and there's always another girl to go after lol, that does sound awful haha
Date: 8/9/2013 1:21:00 AM
This one was very interesting in the story it told. Clever one! I see I got the two great Richards on my winners' list side by side!!! Congrats.
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/10/2013 3:42:00 PM
Thank you Petal, good contest, I gained two poems out of it, would rather the other have been in it but can't write these shorties lol
Date: 8/8/2013 9:56:00 PM
Richard, an awesome win... PD
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/10/2013 3:40:00 PM
Hiya my Sweet Dark Friend and thank you, and where's my kisses hmm lol :)
Date: 8/8/2013 3:37:00 PM
You are the dude! this is so good Richard, you are sure to get the girl.
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/10/2013 3:37:00 PM
I missed this comment Rick and the result is in, I think we did ok, thanks for te support
Date: 8/6/2013 10:16:00 PM
This is very good. I liked it. I also wish you luck in the contest...... Lucilla
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/10/2013 3:31:00 PM
Thanks Lucy, like the new avatar :)
Date: 8/6/2013 3:41:00 PM
Mmmm, romantic, are we? Fortunate be the being who'd incite you to serenade her. Care to name the flower? lol. Lovely write, bruv. I like. Licia :-)
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/6/2013 6:36:00 PM
Come on Sis, you know better than to ask that lol, anyway, I specifically expressed him as he, not me, so please don't go blowing my cover haha
Date: 8/3/2013 9:40:00 PM
wishing you luck... :-) ~SKAT~
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/5/2013 8:37:00 AM
Thank you Skat, you too in all ways :)
Date: 8/3/2013 9:33:00 PM
Very enchanting Richard,,,,,,
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/5/2013 8:35:00 AM
Thank you Donna, always a pleasure to see you
Date: 8/2/2013 11:03:00 PM
A romantic side to complement the teasing one? How refreshing! This is a lovely write, Richard....full of every sweet thing! Yummy! Auntie had a sweet treat this AM....take care! hugs!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/5/2013 1:05:00 PM
hmmmmmmmm....only if you will! ;)
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Richard D Seal
Date: 8/3/2013 4:28:00 AM
Shucks Auntie, you got me feeling all mushy now lol I'm taking a break and off to London for a couple of days, heading for the British Museum, see you soon, :) and try and keep out of trouble while I'm away haha
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