In Pits of Pain

Inside scrapings of darkness how restless and doomed, the bellow crashing in like an agonized moon; the tunnel hears blood whooshing in pits full of rain, hurling damn imaginings of her fetus’ pain, wails rip through the stained window and grinds near right lung, heart reeks for a babe frozen knowing breath is gone; if I could pluck her memories from uterine wall, to touch sun’s glint christening new eyes on dawn’s call. ----------- *Sadly,research estimates that approximately 1 in 4 pregnancies end in miscarriage; and most women experience a grief period during such occurrences. For Susan's If These Walls Could Talk Contest
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Poet Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 5:17 AM
Soupmail.
Johnson Avatar
September 25, 2012 at 8:15 AM
Such a silent sadness when women feel this loss. It breaks my heart they have to bear this tragic solemn cross. Congrats on a powerful communication.
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
September 21, 2012 at 9:23 PM
Congratulations on your amazing win, Nette! It was written with such honesty and passion, I was moved to tears. After almost six months, I still feel the grief...hugs, Rhonda
M V Avatar
September 21, 2012 at 11:02 AM
It is touching one,nette.Words are beautifully packed.Congratulations on your well deserved win!
Brown Avatar
September 20, 2012 at 12:15 PM
Congratulations on your win Nette. Love, Carol
Ramage Avatar
September 20, 2012 at 6:00 AM
Very sad poem, and so true. The loss in a miscarriage or abortion, most women experience grief. Well done. Lee
Kendrick Avatar
September 18, 2012 at 3:26 PM
Emotive winning work..Congrats on your win..Sara
Macfarlane Avatar
September 18, 2012 at 1:03 PM
A touching and heartfelt write Nette! Congrats on your win! Hugs
Liwayway Avatar
September 18, 2012 at 10:04 AM
I like you for being so good in writing poems. very creative..very unique. Congratulations on your big win!!! (^_^)
Johnson Avatar
September 18, 2012 at 9:30 AM
Of course they do. A unique and poignant interpretation of the contest. Congratulations Nette. Love, Joyce
Sweetheart Avatar
September 18, 2012 at 8:03 AM
CONGRATS NETTE LUV ON AN EXQUISITE WRITE AND WIN FOR ANOTHER CLASSIC POEM .. ALWAYS A RARE TREAT TO ABSORB YOUR INTRICATE WORDS OF EXPRESSION .. SOOOOOOOOOO GRRRRRREAT ..
Sefunmi Avatar
September 18, 2012 at 6:12 AM
I like the way you always pen your poems. Congrats on your win!
Dietrich Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 9:09 PM
Way to go, Nette. BIG congratulations on your win with this unique entry.
Wellington Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 6:13 PM
A fantastic uniquely written piece, Nette. Big congrats on a super fine win! One love. Joy Wells
Guzzi Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 6:12 PM
our first walls....Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Poet Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 11:32 AM
Congrats Nette on this win!!You surely are a poet from another planet!
Susan Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 10:39 AM
Congratulations on your #2 win in my contest! a creative take on the theme - was surprised and then pitted with pain :)
A   Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 10:26 AM
NETTE, congratulations with your wonderful win in Susan's "If These Walls Could Talk..." contest.. have a nice day~ PD
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 10:24 AM
Congratulations nette on your terrific write and win xx
Goff Avatar
September 15, 2012 at 6:56 AM
Geez Nette....you have written a beautiful work here! Takes my breath away! To my faves...jimbo
Sweetheart Avatar
September 14, 2012 at 9:03 AM
a tremendous expose' of the inner woman dealing with suffering of lost child Nette luv .. sad r the facts .. sweet success promised for this unique entry .. we have our own personal stuation with my youngest sin Eric's wife who r home with us now awaiting baby 9/22 but she had a horrible miscarriage 2 years ago and we almost lost her ,, so thankxx for this extraordinary piece luv..
Nair Avatar
September 14, 2012 at 12:05 AM
I like the scrappings of darkness and the sombre air of this poem,nette, nice! hugs, Jag
Dietrich Avatar
September 13, 2012 at 10:25 PM
wow, what a sad one, Nette. And what a very unique way to do the wall challenge. It's for that contest, right? Great creativity.
A   Avatar
September 13, 2012 at 9:20 PM
Nette, i need someone to pluck my memories, and give them light... i love your poem...impresive.. enjoyed stopping by ;-) Have yourself a goodnight~ PD
Poet Avatar
September 13, 2012 at 12:55 PM
An excellent poem here Nette!Love your approach!Best wishes to you.Thanks for my placement in your contest.
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