In Pits of Pain

Inside scrapings of darkness how restless and doomed, the bellow crashing in like an agonized moon; the tunnel hears blood whooshing in pits full of rain, hurling damn imaginings of her fetus’ pain, wails rip through the stained window and grinds near right lung, heart reeks for a babe frozen knowing breath is gone; if I could pluck her memories from uterine wall, to touch sun’s glint christening new eyes on dawn’s call. ----------- *Sadly,research estimates that approximately 1 in 4 pregnancies end in miscarriage; and most women experience a grief period during such occurrences. For Susan's If These Walls Could Talk Contest

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Date: 10/8/2012 5:17:00 AM
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Date: 9/25/2012 8:15:00 AM
Such a silent sadness when women feel this loss. It breaks my heart they have to bear this tragic solemn cross. Congrats on a powerful communication.
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Date: 9/21/2012 9:23:00 PM
Congratulations on your amazing win, Nette! It was written with such honesty and passion, I was moved to tears. After almost six months, I still feel the grief...hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 9/21/2012 11:02:00 AM
It is touching one,nette.Words are beautifully packed.Congratulations on your well deserved win!
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Date: 9/20/2012 12:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/20/2012 6:00:00 AM
Very sad poem, and so true. The loss in a miscarriage or abortion, most women experience grief. Well done. Lee
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Date: 9/18/2012 3:26:00 PM
Emotive winning work..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 9/18/2012 1:03:00 PM
A touching and heartfelt write Nette! Congrats on your win! Hugs
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Date: 9/18/2012 10:04:00 AM
I like you for being so good in writing poems. very creative..very unique. Congratulations on your big win!!! (^_^)
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Date: 9/18/2012 9:30:00 AM
Of course they do. A unique and poignant interpretation of the contest. Congratulations Nette. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/18/2012 8:03:00 AM
CONGRATS NETTE LUV ON AN EXQUISITE WRITE AND WIN FOR ANOTHER CLASSIC POEM .. ALWAYS A RARE TREAT TO ABSORB YOUR INTRICATE WORDS OF EXPRESSION .. SOOOOOOOOOO GRRRRRREAT ..
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Date: 9/18/2012 6:12:00 AM
I like the way you always pen your poems. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 9/17/2012 9:09:00 PM
Way to go, Nette. BIG congratulations on your win with this unique entry.
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Date: 9/17/2012 6:13:00 PM
A fantastic uniquely written piece, Nette. Big congrats on a super fine win! One love. Joy Wells
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Date: 9/17/2012 6:12:00 PM
our first walls....Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 9/17/2012 11:32:00 AM
Congrats Nette on this win!!You surely are a poet from another planet!
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your #2 win in my contest! a creative take on the theme - was surprised and then pitted with pain :)
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:26:00 AM
NETTE, congratulations with your wonderful win in Susan's "If These Walls Could Talk..." contest.. have a nice day~ PD
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:24:00 AM
Congratulations nette on your terrific write and win xx
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Date: 9/15/2012 6:56:00 AM
Geez Nette....you have written a beautiful work here! Takes my breath away! To my faves...jimbo
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Date: 9/14/2012 9:03:00 AM
a tremendous expose' of the inner woman dealing with suffering of lost child Nette luv .. sad r the facts .. sweet success promised for this unique entry .. we have our own personal stuation with my youngest sin Eric's wife who r home with us now awaiting baby 9/22 but she had a horrible miscarriage 2 years ago and we almost lost her ,, so thankxx for this extraordinary piece luv..
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Date: 9/14/2012 12:05:00 AM
I like the scrappings of darkness and the sombre air of this poem,nette, nice! hugs, Jag
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Date: 9/13/2012 10:25:00 PM
wow, what a sad one, Nette. And what a very unique way to do the wall challenge. It's for that contest, right? Great creativity.
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Date: 9/13/2012 9:20:00 PM
Nette, i need someone to pluck my memories, and give them light... i love your poem...impresive.. enjoyed stopping by ;-) Have yourself a goodnight~ PD
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Date: 9/13/2012 12:55:00 PM
An excellent poem here Nette!Love your approach!Best wishes to you.Thanks for my placement in your contest.
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