In One Fell Swoop

Your words cut-  like a woodcutters axe
chopping me down,
blood spills onto the pine strewn floor.
Exhaling words. Spoken without thought,
or love, trapped in an unbreakable bubble
that floats around my head.
Purple memories emanate from the centre,
rippling into infinity, becoming distant…
lost to the edge of life.
I thought love would save me, but
it too floats away on a starlit stream.

15/5/2013
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Guzzi Avatar
January 29, 2015 at 4:12 PM
Perfect David, always a joy to read your work. Light & Love
Guzzi Avatar
January 8, 2015 at 7:39 PM
ahh excellent [purple memories!] Light & love
Richards Avatar
August 9, 2014 at 9:45 PM
Fantastic poem very well written David
Kiser Avatar
July 1, 2014 at 12:27 PM
"Purple memories", I love that.
Lindley Avatar
June 5, 2014 at 7:46 AM
Good God man!!!!! This has it all and part of it's greatness is it's a fantastic sad light shone in such brevity!! A true gem it is!!!!! Directly into my fav in goes and Thanks!!!!
Manassian Avatar
June 4, 2014 at 10:06 AM
What a moving write! I'm touched by the depth of pain and hurt. David....I know of pain. Keep on loving.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 2:41 AM
with these words and the imagery you aroused a lot of sadness, pain and hurts....... a deep longing an ache to be filled... :O this what i see in this... exhaling words without thought.... that's so uncaring and hatred line.... :O GBU.. :)
Melugin Avatar
June 2, 2014 at 6:15 PM
Cuts and memory opened wounds defies love anew and the edge is eternal. David, you are poetry! 7 My best chuck
Lindley Avatar
May 26, 2014 at 5:53 PM
This is one truly fine write my friend! Bravo!!!!!! and BRAVO!!!!
Davis Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 2:28 PM
Beautiful and full of emotion. I love it. Thank you for commenting on my poem, I'm new.
Espinola Collins Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 2:23 PM
So deep and beautifully written...I enjoyed it David :) Ana
Smith Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 7:19 AM
So relative to me of a different time. Made my heart wrench in just those few lines.. ..
Twinkle Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 6:21 AM
Visceral and stunning imagery... the title is very eye-catching too!
Emp Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 3:06 AM
Sometimes we think Love really the one who break us down but the thought of it is the person whom we trust to love is the one who did it to us. This is a heartbreaking words, clearly express your feelings. Congrats.
Thirtyseven Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:04 PM
"... trapped..." what a wonderful emotive line, in a poem of such sincerity.
A  Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 4:18 PM
Love, how silly at times. I like this David......SKAT
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 5:44 AM
Your poetry invites emotions to flow in a way that reaches the heart. Beautiful though sad David.
Sirak Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 4:46 AM
Sad and beautiful. Your imagery is amazing.
Merrill Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 3:01 AM
Nice write, David. Outstanding imagery. Thank you for sharing this :)
Khan Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 2:32 AM
Liked it throughout except ''Purple memories'' I didn't understand its meaning !
Dietrich Avatar
May 18, 2014 at 4:09 PM
Great imagery, David. ME LIKES.
Dietrich Avatar
May 18, 2014 at 4:09 PM
Oh, and I'm with Frank here. so glad you have not left us.
Austin Avatar
May 18, 2014 at 10:57 AM
A fine poem on the loss of love, David. I once equated it to riding on a street car watching the outside pedestrians fly by. Ghostly. Love, daver
Dylan Avatar
May 18, 2014 at 10:52 AM
Hello David... Your words are perfect in this poem... the title and the penning is great.. the imagery.. is awesome.. I do love your poetry.. hugs Brooke
Van Breda Avatar
May 18, 2014 at 10:09 AM
Hi David-- Back to reading your awesome pieces, and this one is no exception. The title is at the same time ironic and very true to this write. "Exhaling words... spoken without thought or love-- trapped in an unbreakable bubble"-- you really inspire me to write from the heart. Xx-Xx
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