In One Fell Swoop

Your words cut-  like a woodcutters axe
chopping me down,
blood spills onto the pine strewn floor.
Exhaling words. Spoken without thought,
or love, trapped in an unbreakable bubble
that floats around my head.
Purple memories emanate from the centre,
rippling into infinity, becoming distant…
lost to the edge of life.
I thought love would save me, but
it too floats away on a starlit stream.

15/5/2013

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Date: 1/29/2015 4:12:00 PM
Perfect David, always a joy to read your work. Light & Love
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Date: 1/8/2015 7:39:00 PM
ahh excellent [purple memories!] Light & love
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Date: 8/9/2014 9:45:00 PM
Fantastic poem very well written David
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Date: 7/1/2014 12:27:00 PM
"Purple memories", I love that.
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Date: 6/5/2014 7:46:00 AM
Good God man!!!!! This has it all and part of it's greatness is it's a fantastic sad light shone in such brevity!! A true gem it is!!!!! Directly into my fav in goes and Thanks!!!!
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Date: 6/4/2014 10:06:00 AM
What a moving write! I'm touched by the depth of pain and hurt. David....I know of pain. Keep on loving.
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Date: 6/3/2014 2:41:00 AM
with these words and the imagery you aroused a lot of sadness, pain and hurts....... a deep longing an ache to be filled... :O this what i see in this... exhaling words without thought.... that's so uncaring and hatred line.... :O GBU.. :)
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Date: 6/2/2014 6:15:00 PM
Cuts and memory opened wounds defies love anew and the edge is eternal. David, you are poetry! 7 My best chuck
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Date: 5/26/2014 5:53:00 PM
This is one truly fine write my friend! Bravo!!!!!! and BRAVO!!!!
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Date: 5/22/2014 2:28:00 PM
Beautiful and full of emotion. I love it. Thank you for commenting on my poem, I'm new.
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Date: 5/22/2014 2:23:00 PM
So deep and beautifully written...I enjoyed it David :) Ana
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Date: 5/22/2014 7:19:00 AM
So relative to me of a different time. Made my heart wrench in just those few lines.. ..
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Date: 5/22/2014 6:21:00 AM
Visceral and stunning imagery... the title is very eye-catching too!
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Date: 5/22/2014 3:06:00 AM
Sometimes we think Love really the one who break us down but the thought of it is the person whom we trust to love is the one who did it to us. This is a heartbreaking words, clearly express your feelings. Congrats.
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Date: 5/19/2014 11:04:00 PM
"... trapped..." what a wonderful emotive line, in a poem of such sincerity.
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Date: 5/19/2014 4:18:00 PM
Love, how silly at times. I like this David......SKAT
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Date: 5/19/2014 5:44:00 AM
Your poetry invites emotions to flow in a way that reaches the heart. Beautiful though sad David.
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Date: 5/19/2014 4:46:00 AM
Sad and beautiful. Your imagery is amazing.
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Date: 5/19/2014 3:01:00 AM
Nice write, David. Outstanding imagery. Thank you for sharing this :)
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Date: 5/19/2014 2:32:00 AM
Liked it throughout except ''Purple memories'' I didn't understand its meaning !
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Date: 5/18/2014 4:09:00 PM
Great imagery, David. ME LIKES.
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Date: 5/18/2014 4:09:00 PM
Oh, and I'm with Frank here. so glad you have not left us.
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Date: 5/18/2014 10:57:00 AM
A fine poem on the loss of love, David. I once equated it to riding on a street car watching the outside pedestrians fly by. Ghostly. Love, daver
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Date: 5/18/2014 10:52:00 AM
Hello David... Your words are perfect in this poem... the title and the penning is great.. the imagery.. is awesome.. I do love your poetry.. hugs Brooke
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Date: 5/18/2014 10:09:00 AM
Hi David-- Back to reading your awesome pieces, and this one is no exception. The title is at the same time ironic and very true to this write. "Exhaling words... spoken without thought or love-- trapped in an unbreakable bubble"-- you really inspire me to write from the heart. Xx-Xx
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