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In Love's Hold

starry sky above
the ‘night queen’ perfumes the air 
 as your arms wrap me~
your warm breath falls on my neck,
wingless I float in the sky

July.24.2022

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/8/2022 7:47:00 AM

Wow!! A romantic one here. Reads like a good contender for a contest to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara

Vladislav Raven

Date: 7/28/2022 2:35:00 PM

Hi Valsa, this is such a peacefully gentle write that comes from your pen. Your words sing in this Tanka. Love flows from your Tanka. You need no wings to float through the sky, the heart shall take you there. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always ..... Mike. XX Has to be a fave. I am beginning to love Tankas.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 7/27/2022 6:00:00 PM

Dear Valsa, Enjoyed reading this beautiful Tanka - so much said in so few words! Thank you for reading my poems, and leaving the best comments I can ever imagine! I thought of talking to you, but your soup email is not active. Could you please let me know how I can reach you? You can soupmail me. Love ~ Mala

Rico Leffanta

Date: 7/24/2022 6:34:00 PM

With TV, fewer people experience the fragrance of night-blooming flowers - except secret lovers, of course! Enjoyed, Valsa!

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:51:00 AM

Quite true...! When glued to TV, they don't have the chance to enjoy the fragrance of flowers outside ! Thank you Rico...

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/24/2022 6:17:00 PM

That last line... All I can think of is... Wingless, the bird dropped from the sky. So, I conclude -- with pristine, geometric logic -- that you are not a lovebird! lol. Thanks, gw

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:49:00 AM

Just a bird... with wings broken....! :( Thank you Gershon

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/24/2022 3:01:00 PM

A lovely write. A story in just 5 lines. Have a wonderful day...................

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:47:00 AM

Happy for your comment dear Paula ! Thanks and hugs !

Robert Gorelick

Date: 7/24/2022 12:23:00 PM

A tanka of love's reverie is offered with a bejeweled splendor! Robert

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:47:00 AM

Wow... so happy ! Thanks a lot Robert !

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/24/2022 8:31:00 AM

wow, this is a real beauty!

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:46:00 AM

Much gratitude Andrea...

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/24/2022 8:31:00 AM

Very nice and peaceful Valsa :)

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:45:00 AM

Heidi, thank you very much !

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/24/2022 6:52:00 AM

A beautiful write, Valsa...buoyant on the wings of love...

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:45:00 AM

Thank you so much Vijay!

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/24/2022 6:23:00 AM

Powerful stuff is love Valsa, so is your poetry. Lovely tanka.

Valsa George
Date: 7/25/2022 1:44:00 AM

Thanks a lot harry ! Have a happ week ahead ....

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/24/2022 4:20:00 AM

Valsa, you have an astounding depth of creativity. Your thoughts are entwined with an admiring flower in a manner that is both charming and attractive, and the scent is delicious. Be blessed dear poetess friend.

Valsa George
Date: 7/24/2022 5:28:00 AM

Hi Lsaad, you are a great man who make small people feel big. Your beautiful words of praise go a long way in making the poet in me strive for better performance ! Thanks a lot friend...

Michael Tor

Date: 7/24/2022 2:58:00 AM

Such fragrant beauty written here Valsa. Your words are romantically intertwined with an adoring plant. Love your Poetry Valsa. You are incredibly talented. God bless you...

Valsa George
Date: 7/24/2022 5:25:00 AM

Michael, you have made me soaring in the air ! I am an average poet with average talents. I know it ! However there is great pleasure in hearing such wonderful words of praise. Thanks a lot friend....

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/24/2022 1:43:00 AM

Strange I hate perfume. I once wanted to buy a present for my wife. Couldn't stand the scent. I made my purchase from the pavement.

Valsa George
Date: 7/24/2022 1:53:00 AM

Here the perfume is not synthetic ! Night Queen is a garden plant which produces beautiful clusters of flowers with a sweet scent.... ! Thank you Victor !