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In Love's Hold

starry sky above
the ‘night queen’ perfumes the air 
 as your arms wrap me~
your warm breath falls on my neck,
wingless I float in the sky

July.24.2022

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Sara Kendrick

November 8, 2022 at 7:47 AM

Wow!! A romantic one here. Reads like a good contender for a contest to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara

Vladislav Raven

July 28, 2022 at 2:35 PM

Hi Valsa, this is such a peacefully gentle write that comes from your pen. Your words sing in this Tanka. Love flows from your Tanka. You need no wings to float through the sky, the heart shall take you there. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always ..... Mike. XX Has to be a fave. I am beginning to love Tankas.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

July 27, 2022 at 6:00 PM

Dear Valsa, Enjoyed reading this beautiful Tanka - so much said in so few words! Thank you for reading my poems, and leaving the best comments I can ever imagine! I thought of talking to you, but your soup email is not active. Could you please let me know how I can reach you? You can soupmail me. Love ~ Mala

Rico Leffanta

July 24, 2022 at 6:34 PM

With TV, fewer people experience the fragrance of night-blooming flowers - except secret lovers, of course! Enjoyed, Valsa!

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:51 AM

Quite true...! When glued to TV, they don't have the chance to enjoy the fragrance of flowers outside ! Thank you Rico...

Gershon Wolf

July 24, 2022 at 6:17 PM

That last line... All I can think of is... Wingless, the bird dropped from the sky. So, I conclude -- with pristine, geometric logic -- that you are not a lovebird! lol. Thanks, gw

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:49 AM

Just a bird... with wings broken....! :( Thank you Gershon

Paula Goldsmith

July 24, 2022 at 3:01 PM

A lovely write. A story in just 5 lines. Have a wonderful day...................

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:47 AM

Happy for your comment dear Paula ! Thanks and hugs !

Robert Gorelick

July 24, 2022 at 12:23 PM

A tanka of love's reverie is offered with a bejeweled splendor! Robert

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:47 AM

Wow... so happy ! Thanks a lot Robert !

Andrea Dietrich

July 24, 2022 at 8:31 AM

wow, this is a real beauty!

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:46 AM

Much gratitude Andrea...

Heidi Sands

July 24, 2022 at 8:31 AM

Very nice and peaceful Valsa :)

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:45 AM

Heidi, thank you very much !

Vijay Pandit

July 24, 2022 at 6:52 AM

A beautiful write, Valsa...buoyant on the wings of love...

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:45 AM

Thank you so much Vijay!

Harry Horsman

July 24, 2022 at 6:23 AM

Powerful stuff is love Valsa, so is your poetry. Lovely tanka.

Valsa George

July 25, 2022 at 1:44 AM

Thanks a lot harry ! Have a happ week ahead ....

Sotto Poet

July 24, 2022 at 4:20 AM

Valsa, you have an astounding depth of creativity. Your thoughts are entwined with an admiring flower in a manner that is both charming and attractive, and the scent is delicious. Be blessed dear poetess friend.

Valsa George

July 24, 2022 at 5:28 AM

Hi Lsaad, you are a great man who make small people feel big. Your beautiful words of praise go a long way in making the poet in me strive for better performance ! Thanks a lot friend...

Michael Tor

July 24, 2022 at 2:58 AM

Such fragrant beauty written here Valsa. Your words are romantically intertwined with an adoring plant. Love your Poetry Valsa. You are incredibly talented. God bless you...

Valsa George

July 24, 2022 at 5:25 AM

Michael, you have made me soaring in the air ! I am an average poet with average talents. I know it ! However there is great pleasure in hearing such wonderful words of praise. Thanks a lot friend....

Victor Buhagiar

July 24, 2022 at 1:43 AM

Strange I hate perfume. I once wanted to buy a present for my wife. Couldn't stand the scent. I made my purchase from the pavement.

Valsa George

July 24, 2022 at 1:53 AM

Here the perfume is not synthetic ! Night Queen is a garden plant which produces beautiful clusters of flowers with a sweet scent.... ! Thank you Victor !