In Love- Our Story For Contest

In Love- Our story ( a sort of Sonnet)

 

That first day in the factory, your eye
had followed me as down the aisle I passed
still lingered moments after I'd gone by,
you vowed then that glance would not be your last.
Your girl's intelligence network gave chase
to find the whys and wherefores, who I be,
get answers and a name put to the face
returning with results by morning tea.
The first dates nothing sparked, no hearts ablaze
just questions, feelers, finding common ground,
our differences plain in many ways,
yet all it took was one bond to be found

So thus by circumstance and stars were formed
the elements that melded our love's dawn.

As time and youth faced off and called 'en garde'
anger and vicious words both took the field
our tempers raged, a truce was just too hard,
for neither would our stubborn ground we yield .
But from within that fierce intensity,
the furnace stoked by every spat and fight
also came passion tempered then set free
desire burned as cressets in our nights.
Our opportunities, though all too rare,
snatched moments, any time in any place,
as if the world had run and left us there
and gave our battered hearts some breathing space.

The light from our love's morning showed the fact
the truth that often opposites attract.

That first midnight cry from the newborn child,
your head fell back, relieved from hours of pain,
eyes closed briefly and then you looked and smiled
“ I'm never bloody doing that again”.
The polar opposites that since we met
both held us and repelled us, yin and yang,
now by this nascent soul, the future let
love tear them all asunder, left to hang.
The baby, girl, teenager, woman grew,
tended by us, fed food and word and song,
full fledged in mind and body, off she flew,
the two of us now left to get along.

Without her we'd have gone separate ways
new bonds now bind us both through our love's days

We sit, you knit, I frown and chew a pen
the crossword finished, turn another page,
adjacent chairs from six, in bed by ten,
routine crept in unnoticed with our age.
Wordless orders given, the curtains drawn,
leave mugs in sink, TV to standby mode,
abandoned, cat looks up at us, forlorn
then out the door it hurtles up the road.
For thirty years of love have come to this,
two tired bodies snuggle, conserve heat,
our silent breathing pauses for one kiss,
a gasp as my warm back receives cold feet

When two people know everything's alright
then let the sun go down on their love's night

1st February 2016
For contest 'Our year in love' by Olive Eloisa Guillermo
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Delaney Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 11:21 PM
Viv:You are a storyteller extraordinaire. Clever, witty and all with rythm & rhyme. So much to enjoy here with the real scenes of domestic bliss we all relate to intertwined. SuZ
Wigley Avatar
February 3, 2016 at 12:21 AM
Thanks, Suz, very kind. How many youngsters think that future love will be all Mister Darcy, Moonlit strolls, Violins and never a cross word? Boy, are they in for a shock..... Thanks for dropping by. Viv x
Beaufort Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 7:51 PM
Funny what time does to our relationships. You capture it all so well. Great story. Like the couplet at the end--sort of sonnet like--yes. She could have gotten to know you much faster if she'd just given you a pint. It works every time.
Wigley Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 10:35 PM
Good point, Duke, but maybe I was too drunk to notice at the time :) Thanks for dropping by, regards, Viv
Petersen Potter Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 4:06 PM
Excellent pen Viv! Beautifully painted love piece! A 7! And thank you for visiting my page I deeply appreciate it.Good Luck in the contest!:) Wishing you a very lovely week! In his light God bless you always!:) D
Wigley Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 10:36 PM
Thanks, Dorian, appreciate your lovely comment. blessings, Viv x
Leiser Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 12:26 AM
Enjoyed this delightful and honestly written sonnet, Viv. Love's highs and low and life can test, yet deepen the ties that bind. A 7 and good luck in the contest:)
Wigley Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 12:33 AM
Thanks Laura, I'll never get a job with Mills & Boon, that's for sure :) . Viv x
Gupta Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 12:05 AM
Beautiful! The couplet at the end touches our heart universally.
Wigley Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 12:33 AM
Thank you Probir, I appreciaate your visit. Regards, Viv
Smith Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 3:18 PM
You know it's love when you can both be comfortable with each other. Good luck Viv
Wigley Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 11:27 PM
Yes, Tim, those torrid,breathless interludes are long past. The only breathless interludes are at the top of the stairs, getting my second wind :) . Thanks for dropping by. regards, Viv
Andresen Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 11:59 AM
- A long story, filled with love Viv - Good luck in the contest, Olive will love this :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Wigley Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 11:27 PM
Hope she does, Anne Lise, I needed a sleep after typing it :) .Viv x
Onclaud Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 10:13 AM
the flow of your lines is enchanting, viv.. you awe me!..huggs
Wigley Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 11:20 AM
Thanks, nette, my finger joints all ache from doing syllable counts :) . Thanks for dropping by, Viv x
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