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In Dark Isolated Places

the rain is pounding

on well-hidden mounds of dirt 

I can imagine

the sounds of ghostly cries in

dark, isolated places

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Skat A

September 1, 2015 at 11:36 PM

Andrea,, Congratulations on your win.... SKAT

Mark Woods

September 1, 2015 at 1:39 AM

Cool twist in the theme, love what you've done. Never any doubt that this would do well.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

September 1, 2015 at 12:41 AM

Wonderful take Andrea with this lovely tanka n big congrats on great win!

Eve Roper

August 31, 2015 at 10:06 PM

Wonderful write a. 7 congratulations on your win Hugs Eve

Carrie Richards

August 31, 2015 at 4:08 PM

Shivers of Halloween in this one !! Congrats to you, Andrea !! (It won't be long now !!)

Jan Allison

August 31, 2015 at 12:11 PM

Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

August 31, 2015 at 11:37 AM

Wow, Andrea...hadn't read this before, but it gave me chills just now. So few words, but so very powerful in all that's conveyed. Congratulations on your big win! Sandra

Daver Austin

August 30, 2015 at 11:05 AM

Those "well hidden mounds of dirt" with bony hands thrusting up or a shallow buried vampire's coffin - just a few of the horrible images this wonderful creepy poem brings up. OOOOHHHHH WOOOOOOOOOOO. Love, daver

Paul Callus

August 28, 2015 at 6:15 PM

You create a dark, ghostly atmosphere by the use of imagery which can also be taken as being metaphorical. Could also be evil spirits pounding at our innermost concealed dark secrets #7 // paul

Paul Callus

August 31, 2015 at 11:38 AM

Back with deserved congratulations, Andrea!!

Laura Leiser

August 28, 2015 at 5:31 PM

Great imagery in just a few, well chosen words, Andrea! I enjoyed this :)

Jennifer Walker

August 28, 2015 at 3:35 PM

Dark, powerful pen.

Kp Nunez

August 28, 2015 at 11:55 AM

Could be interpreted as souls of those who died crying out for justice or those who are buried alive. Eerie and powerful images you've captured in a tanka. Way to go, Andie!

Andrea Dietrich

August 28, 2015 at 5:22 PM

that is it exactly. But they were not necessarily buried alive. there have become too many of these places in our world today.

Emile Pinet

August 28, 2015 at 9:36 AM

The shell of dark that surrounds the author’s words acts as a cocoon protecting her from the words. Emile.

James Peranteau

August 28, 2015 at 8:41 AM

How creeeeepy is this Andrea....wooosh....my .. life like dear poet. Have a beautiful weekend Andrea...much love,

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

August 28, 2015 at 4:53 AM

Yeah the true essence to the theme Andrea!

Eileen Manassian

August 28, 2015 at 3:55 AM

I don't like dark....but if I did...this would be the icing on the cake. Hugs...

April Walter Skyy

August 28, 2015 at 12:50 AM

Nice writing. Short and to the point. I hope you will stop pass sometime and check out some of my writing. I think you would enjoy "Forbidden Love" and "Moonlight. I hope to see you there. Have a good night!!!

Arthur Vaso

August 27, 2015 at 11:44 PM

I like, I like! :)

Matthew Anish

August 27, 2015 at 11:38 PM

Eerie feeling to this poem. Very evocative! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

James Inman

August 27, 2015 at 9:31 PM

Very good ominous write, Andrea. I really like it. Don't know if you got my SoupMail

Alexis Y.

August 27, 2015 at 8:43 PM

Andrea, as always this a well written dark write. God job! Best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Jill Spagnola

August 27, 2015 at 6:07 PM

This piece touched all my senses! Your work cast an awesome tone :), jill

Joseph May

August 27, 2015 at 5:57 PM

I like the spooky imagery in this piece Andrea...nicely penned..

Frederic Parker

August 27, 2015 at 5:56 PM

I see a lot of potential in this post, wished for the rest of the story..great opening lines for a longer write..

Judy Konos

August 27, 2015 at 4:48 PM

Andrea, am I to understand that you will soon be directing Warner Bros. motion picture, 'Isolated'? Certainly sounds like it from this movie trailer.....

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