In Another Time

She asked for five more minutes
but only stayed for three 
her eyes are filled with sadness
for a world that cannot see
the pain within her heart 
was paid with somber tears 
dreams remaining distant 
leaving only fears.
Thoughts crash through a war
destroying all who pass
afraid of what should happen 
if we felt free to ask
the questions that lay silent 
inside our lonesome hearts 
when peace goes off to war 
and never seems to last.
Yet still we cling to memories 
of those who've met their end 
and ask for many moments 
that God cannot send.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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July 16, 2016 at 12:36 AM
Victoria, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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July 13, 2016 at 4:54 AM
A lovely, poignant piece and a super first submission to the site. Welcome, Victoria, to Poetry Soup. I'm sure that you will find your stay with us informative, educational and fun, and will meet a nice bunch of fellow wordsmiths. Enjoy. Viv x
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July 12, 2016 at 10:06 PM
Victoria, Welcome to poetry soup, after reading this I feel as if you are an Accomplished writer. Glad to see you enjoying it so much here. Flourishing among this community is easier than you think. Keep up the good work. *SKAT*
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July 12, 2016 at 4:01 PM
excellent poem;congratulations
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July 12, 2016 at 3:59 PM
Wonderful poem Victoria.
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