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Immortal Flame

Slay me
September sun
hot penetrating star
wanton repossession I lust
Sol-mate

Kindle
kiss me afire
spread me bathed blushing surge
flare flies flamingo dawning sky
birth-day



Susan Ashley
July 15, 2017


*Poet's note: 'Smile Of The Sunrise', an acrylic painting by Marie Green*

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Robert Lindley

October 6, 2020 at 4:53 AM

Slay us with words from a true poet's heart. Gift us with the inked fruit from you golden pen. Flow like brilliant comet across a star chart. So we may dream every now and then.... Afav.. a gem ...

Susan Ashley

October 6, 2020 at 7:27 AM

Ah, my dear friend, your poetic comments capture my imagination with their rich texture, rhymes and depth. Thank you for the cherished gifts flowing from your golden pen, Robert. I'm humble and honor to know that my poem filled you with glowing inspiration you've so generously given here. You enhance my poetry page with your shining talent, Robert. Your friendship and your fav are both truly treasured. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

John Watt

March 11, 2020 at 10:17 PM

Susan, you write with such intelligence and heart. A powerful combination for a poet to have. Sol-mate is so creative, and hyphenating birthday to match it as a parallel thought. The gorgeous painting is surpassed only by your fantastic imagery, alliteration, and imagination. This brought a big smile ~ John

Susan Ashley

March 12, 2020 at 9:41 PM

I am honored and humbled to receive such a lovely critique from a poet I hold in such high esteem, John. Your wonderful response to my poem fills me with elation. I relish your thoughts and the fact that this poem brought you a big smile :) The beautiful painting is 'Smile Of The Sunrise' by Marie Green. Somehow my poet's note regarding the artist was deleted, so I've now re-edited to add her credit back again.. your lovely visit here brought my attention to this and I thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Vladislav Raven

November 24, 2018 at 1:35 PM

Hi Susan, an excellent poem. You paint your words with such magnificent creativity. Another gem sings from your pen. I love the content. I love the way you sang in this beautiful work. So much imagery brought forward in such few words. I loved the content of this one Susan. have a wonderful Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Susan Ashley

November 28, 2018 at 7:19 PM

Thank you, my dear friend, for singing such lovely praises in honor of my humble poem.. this write is one of my early favorites and I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the imagery of this piece. Your beautiful comments are gratefully received with a joyous heart, my wonderful friend.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Laura Breidenthal

March 23, 2018 at 11:02 PM

The play on words is brilliant and interesting. "lare flies flamingo dawning sky" Quite an interesting visual there. I like the accompanying photo of the colorful painting you chose as well. Always, Laura

Susan Ashley

March 24, 2018 at 2:04 PM

Yes Laura, the orange and pink streaks of sunrise reminds me of the lovely shades of flamingo plumage.. I am thrilled that you spent some time with this older poem and equally thrilled with your beautiful comments. Your visits is such a pleasure! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

December 23, 2017 at 12:07 PM

"Sol-Mate" I like that... Lovely poem... Rise-up direction sky

Susan Ashley

December 24, 2017 at 8:48 AM

Ahh, Arturo you are exploring my beginnings here on PS.. thank you for spending time with one of my older writes. It delights me to know you enjoyed this poem dear friend. Your lovely visit and comment warms my heart mon ami. Warmest wishes to you .. ~Susan

Paul Callus

December 18, 2017 at 1:23 PM

To lust after beauty is no sin, Susan! This is a lovely double Cinquain, and so is the inspiring visual that accompanies it. ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley

December 18, 2017 at 7:53 PM

Thank you Paul for your lovely words that glow with your genuine warmth and kindness. I truly appreciate the time you have taken with my poetry sharing your priceless thoughts and I cherish the inspiration you instill. Warmest Christmas wishes dear friend.. ~Susan