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Slay me September sun Hot penetrating star Wanton repossession I lust Sol-mate Kindle Kiss me afire Spread me bathed blushing surge Flare flies flamingo dawning sky Birth-day Contest: Late Summer Standard Sponsor: Brian Strand Susan Ashley Re-edit from prose: 6/30/17 revised: 8/9/17 *'Smile of the Sunrise' - Painting by Marie Green*

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Date: 3/23/2018 11:02:00 PM
The play on words is brilliant and interesting. "lare flies flamingo dawning sky" Quite an interesting visual there. I like the accompanying photo of the colorful painting you chose as well. Always, Laura
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Date: 3/24/2018 2:04:00 PM
Yes Laura, the orange and pink streaks of sunrise reminds me of the lovely shades of flamingo plumage.. I am thrilled that you spent some time with this older poem and equally thrilled with your beautiful comments. Your visits is such a pleasure! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 12/23/2017 12:07:00 PM
"Sol-Mate" I like that... Lovely poem... Rise-up direction sky
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Date: 12/24/2017 8:48:00 AM
Ahh, Arturo you are exploring my beginnings here on PS.. thank you for spending time with one of my older writes. It delights me to know you enjoyed this poem dear friend. Your lovely visit and comment warms my heart mon ami. Warmest wishes to you .. ~Susan
Date: 12/18/2017 1:23:00 PM
To lust after beauty is no sin, Susan! This is a lovely double Cinquain, and so is the inspiring visual that accompanies it. ~ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 12/18/2017 7:53:00 PM
Thank you Paul for your lovely words that glow with your genuine warmth and kindness. I truly appreciate the time you have taken with my poetry sharing your priceless thoughts and I cherish the inspiration you instill. Warmest Christmas wishes dear friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/4/2017 7:09:00 PM
Susan - I like 'Sol mate'.
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Date: 9/4/2017 8:10:00 PM
Thank you Rob, for your kind comment and the visit :) Susan
Date: 7/26/2017 7:31:00 PM
for so short a form, you've packed a really passionate punch here! good one! :)
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Date: 1/30/2018 10:04:00 AM
Lol! I just noticed you new post here Taai. Of course, you have me laughing with your P.S. :)) thank you friend, for the return visit and for the lovely comments about the painting and the additional cinquain - I always felt like the first cinquain needed another to complete it. I'm so happy you enjoyed it!! Warmest wishes ~Susan
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Date: 10/22/2017 12:23:00 AM
I am revisiting all your writes now I noticed you are adding marvelous pics to compliment your wonderful writes!! I love that painting and the second cinquian you've added since and PS - I think this was too hot for the sponsor to handle! lol :)
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Date: 7/26/2017 7:55:00 PM
Thank you so much Taai! I tinkered with that little number for some time before I finally whittled it down to what you see now. I'm really glad you enjoyed it :)