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Immaculate Deception

She came from heaven, I tainted a desert
      She knew how to smile, I washed in dirt 
       She looked content, I understood hurt
        She oozed with value, I had no worth 
         She moved effortlessly, I fixed inert
          She was a siren, I salt of the earth 



Bite Size Contest no.60 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Line Gauthier 
02/01/23

Copyright © David Kavanagh | Year Posted 2023

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I Am Anaya Date: 2/7/2023 2:23:00 PM Romeo has put Juliet up on a pedestal no doubt, Juliets loyalty and love for Romeo never underestimate! Annette [musical]..."We Washed Ashore" by Sparks! Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 2/8/2023 2:22:00 PM Sparks! Oh yeah I heard of them, from out your way I think, the falsetto lead voice is great, I haven’t seen Annette, but now I want to more than ever! I Am Anaya Date: 2/7/2023 4:32:00 PM "Annette" the movie with Adam Driver..."Sparks" the band is the soundtrack...very haunting/ a black comedy musical. Your post most enjoyed, magical, like plenty of haunting siren music out there "Song Of The Sirens" David Kavanagh Date: 2/7/2023 2:34:00 PM Heya Anaya Haunting stuff indeed what a great verse by Annette, I hope you liked my post, some Sirens are cool, us men are suckers for them lol, cheers David

Fin Chuuk Date: 2/4/2023 7:41:00 PM So awesome! Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 2/5/2023 4:41:00 AM Thank you Fin, cheers David

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 2/4/2023 9:08:00 AM A delicious bite. Love it. Reminds me of one of my all time favourite songs, The Whole of the Moon by The Waterboys. xomo Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 2/4/2023 9:42:00 AM Brilliant uplifting song Super Mo with superb lyrics, Irish lads as well, sorry I meant Scottish, we’re almost the same, I love the crescendo “You came like a comet (kaboom) blazing your trail” Gives me goosebumps every time! delighted you like my humble effort here, thanks soo much for stopping by today, cheers David

Timothy Ray Date: 2/2/2023 6:48:00 PM reminded me of Wayne's World....we are not worthy....then roamed in Creep by Radiohead....which is what methinks a better fit...but the bigger lesson i take away is before one puts a woman on a pedestal make her a friend....and this line by line reminds me of such....and a great example to be sure...this is the beauty of poetry, discovering ourselves... Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 2/3/2023 12:51:00 AM You know I love that song Creep by Radiohead the explicit version of course, I honestly hadn’t got it in mind when writing, but who knows subconsciously perhaps I tapped into the same source, an inspirational comment, I’m not worthy, cheers David

Jenna Logan Date: 2/2/2023 2:52:00 PM If you knew she seemed to be angelic, her siren song, or hymn was clear to you all along. Your feelings of not being good enough are transcribed quite clearly to me. The comparisons and contrasts are wonderfully phrased, David, even if I misinterpreted your meaning. Loving your thoughts, no matter where they lead or where I take them. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 2/2/2023 3:38:00 PM Heya Jenna great to hear from you, hope you’re keeping well, yes indeed all about contrasts, I’m sure this one could work either way for both sexes, we can become beguiled or hypnotised sometimes helplessly, by the sirens song, making us feel not good enough even though we know something ain’t right, but we’re powerless to fight it, salt of the earth people although honest and hard working also have mental strength, yet can succumb and sometimes pay with their life, your a kind soul thank you for such a great comment, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 2/2/2023 5:29:00 AM - The yin and yang emotions, David - GL in the contest :) - hugs Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 2/2/2023 6:13:00 AM Thank you Anne-Lise, yes there’s certainly that element aboard, beguiled and betrayed, but do we allow this to happen knowing what’s probably in store? I think it’s in our nature, cheers David

Panagiota Romios Date: 2/1/2023 2:22:00 PM Awesome, David! Three cheers or three hundred on a poem, requiring thought! I truly love and fav this.!! ,Panagiota Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 2/1/2023 2:33:00 PM Heya Pangie, I’m delighted you see the bigger picture in this one, requires a little thought indeed, thank you so much for the Fave, makes it all the more worthwhile, cheers David