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I'M Vulnerable

Vulnerable-Song Lyric I see you across the room trying to hide all of your glances It's like you want to tell me whats on your mind but you're afraid of taking chances I know what it is your thinking cos, I've thought about it too but...is the distance that has grown between us, still too great for you? Oh, I can see the moonlight shining lighting up the starry sky Maybe the moonlight can shine bright enough to make your heart beat again with mine I'm still here watching and waiting underneath that very same moon Wondering if all that I'm feeling is the same as you are too chorus Oh how wonderful it would be for us to be so brave To take one little step outside of our dark emotional caves Isn't the silence we have shared so long been enough for you? Isn't it time to throw away our pride and say... I'm vulnerable too Wouldn't it just be so wonderful for us both to say... I'm vulnerable. repeat chorus. John Derek Hamilton August 30, 2016

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/31/2016 4:13:00 AM

Lovely song with a great chorus:) loved this one thoroughly:)

John Hamilton
Date: 8/31/2016 7:22:00 AM

Thanks Jo.

Tim Smith

Date: 8/30/2016 12:05:00 PM

Great song John...I really enjoyed...So many can relate

John Hamilton
Date: 8/30/2016 12:23:00 PM

Thanks Tim, appreciate your feedback, songs are so much easier for me, no one can complain about their simplicity, that's what songs are.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/30/2016 11:37:00 AM

a moving write that expresses the honesty of starting again... a gem, john and thanks for having mercy on my poem for your contest..:) huggs

John Hamilton
Date: 8/30/2016 12:22:00 PM

Thanks Nette, I appreciate your feedback, mercy? no way that was an outstanding poem, wish you didn't discard your first one just because of my comment, others may have wanted to see both. Thanks again.

Phillip Garcia

Date: 8/30/2016 9:28:00 AM

I did not. It's wonderful. A quick observation though on a possible missing 'o' in the second stanza in the last line. Perhaps not but just in case. How do you establish the rhythm for something like this ? Do you first create it in your mind and then write to it or is more structured? I'm asking because I kinda want to try one. It fascinates how some emotions are imagery enough when writing. Just the tone of this sets the stage visually and otherwise.

John Hamilton
Date: 8/30/2016 10:06:00 AM

You're right, thanks for the heads up will fix it! When I listen to a song, I always analyze the lyrics, to isolate the tone and the sentiment , then I visualize my self in the same situation, and how would I write the same feelings.Usually I follow a set pattern from the song that I've heard. There's really nothing that hasn't been done before so song writers we all borrow concepts and emotions and styles from each other, sometimes it morphs into something totally different but has the same feel, that's what makes it beautiful.

Phillip Garcia

Date: 8/30/2016 9:22:00 AM

I've only read your notes so far and already felt the ol' tears of relatability welling up. Now to see if i can avoid the same fate for the actual song