I'M Undone Without Someone

Quite like a moon, will you gloom in to my doom?
Soon and ever I shall stay like a soothing plume
Shine in your smile, can reclaim my life in no time
Unto belling then, I’m undone without someone.

O' touching the leaves, you did loom it to flowers
When you chant, I’m possible is how impossible sounds
Everything changes for you, why dn't you begin a change?
Living with your seizing mirage, do I sound so strange?

Letting me hollow, you stroll into me solo. 
Beginning a walk, you stood in my heart. Bravo!
Indifferently you may render, still I would stay nearer
Unto globe finds nowhere, merely for you, I’m there.

Quite like a moon, will you gloom in to my doom?
Soon and ever I shall stay like a soothing plume
Shine in your smile, will reclaim my life in no time
Unto belling then, I’m undone without someone.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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A  Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 5:51 PM
Chandru, Congrats on the nice win. SKAT love
Allison Avatar
May 10, 2015 at 4:07 PM
Congrats on your win in the Jadazzle United contest. I am sorry Darren wasn't around to do the final judging with me :-) Hugs Jan xx
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
May 6, 2009 at 6:36 AM
Well written and thanks for your comment on "Hey Old Man." The moral is not to judge others as you never know what they've been through. The last lines were meant to show the boy gained an understanding and had teardrops in his eyes as he walked away. The story was baed on an incident between a juvenile delinquent I was working with and a homeless person. If the poem was meant to be mean, it would have been about a politician or a lawyer. God Bless. Vince
Smalling Avatar
April 8, 2009 at 10:40 AM
... gloom to doom, this reads like some ancient mysticism about the moon ... powerful image. An intriguing poem ... excellent!
Torres Avatar
March 30, 2009 at 12:59 AM
nice very nice ..... josh
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