I'M So Jealous

~The One That Got Away~


Here I lay weeping

I sing a sad song to sleep 

Fire cracking bones

kicking, screaming, pulling hair

The moment, gone forever


~SKAT~

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Redempta Asifiwe

May 16, 2019 at 8:32 AM

I can see so much meaning in these few lines, thanks for this beautiful poem, Skat! Love, Redempta

Valerie Staton

January 27, 2019 at 7:20 AM

Very well written!

Freddie Robinson Jr.

November 15, 2016 at 2:31 PM

Love can sometimes make you go a little stir crazy, eh. A very honest poem that hits home to most of us readers. Love your work, Skat. More love and blessings to you.

Linda Pickron

October 21, 2016 at 12:06 AM

Beautiful! I appreciate your welcoming me to Poetry Soup..Sorry it took me so long to respond...forget I had posted here!

Linda Pickron

October 21, 2016 at 12:05 AM

Beautiful! I appreciate your welcoming me to Poetry Soup..Sorry it took me so long to respond...forget I had posted here!

Frank Black Blacharczyk

August 17, 2016 at 3:36 PM

Sometimes the best lines come when we are kicking, screaming and then disappear when we look for paper and pen.

Redempta Asifiwe

May 16, 2019 at 8:31 AM

I agree with you!

Al Juman

July 2, 2016 at 3:48 AM

I am still here--I went no where NICE

Mara Prose

June 8, 2016 at 6:07 AM

Very vivid and relatable! Love your poetry!

Messoh Vincent

May 11, 2016 at 11:13 AM

So pictorial and heavily laden with imagery my dear...... Well written piece

Peter Walsh

April 7, 2016 at 4:51 AM

It's good to vent, but not to dwell there Skat...

Ryan Vandenbosch

February 22, 2016 at 1:10 AM

Well done

Funom Makama

January 19, 2016 at 8:30 AM

Beautiful and well expressed lines in their finest. A great and well deserved 7

Len Gasun

January 15, 2016 at 10:05 PM

Hello my dearest friend, Skat! Coming by to enjoy once again this amazing tanka of yours. Jealousy sometimes is hard to deal with..(a Big Sigh). Coming by also to Thank you heartily for stopping by on my poems and your constant support! I love you my dearest friend and sis Skat! me, Leonora

Omotosho Seth

January 10, 2016 at 5:41 PM

"fire cracking bones " I love that line, every write-up was a hit back to back

Vladislav Raven

January 4, 2016 at 5:08 PM

The creative mind is singing in this Tanka Skat. You always seem to come out with your own special way of putting the words down. You can paint such graphic imagery with your golden pen, even in such short work as a Tanka. Has to be a seven and a fave for this Tanka offers so much....Vladislav

Robyn Campbell

December 28, 2015 at 8:55 AM

SKAT, whoa. I was there with you, my friend. From the first line. Learning from you.

Funom Makama

December 22, 2015 at 7:50 AM

your discrete lines filled with sweet smelling ingredients so palatable to the mind are just beyond gratitude and appreciation. This page is a wonder and your poetry speaks volume of creativity beyond physical perspective. keep it up friend and this is definitely a 7.

Scott Thirtyseven

November 30, 2015 at 6:22 AM

A feeling well captured.

Jordan Cote

November 27, 2015 at 9:16 AM

Hey SKAT!!!!! thank you for leaving a comment on my first poem on here. This is very short, yet to the point, yet very emotional. Brilliant !

Eve Roper

November 10, 2015 at 2:11 PM

Skat, words that bring tears. 11+++ Hugs Eve

Edlynn Nau

November 6, 2015 at 12:11 PM

"Tanka" for the poem! Terrible pun I know. This was vibrant with us seeing the snapshot of love lost, the pain. Excellent in showing the act of emotion in the feeling of jealousy. In just 22 words you conveyed heartbreak. That's a 7