I'M So Jealous

~The One That Got Away~ Here I lay weeping I sing a sad song to sleep Fire cracking bones kicking, screaming, pulling hair The moment, gone forever ~SKAT~

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Redempta Asifiwe

Date: 5/16/2019 8:32:00 AM

I can see so much meaning in these few lines, thanks for this beautiful poem, Skat! Love, Redempta

Valerie Staton

Date: 1/27/2019 7:20:00 AM

Very well written!

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/15/2016 2:31:00 PM

Love can sometimes make you go a little stir crazy, eh. A very honest poem that hits home to most of us readers. Love your work, Skat. More love and blessings to you.

Linda Pickron

Date: 10/21/2016 12:06:00 AM

Beautiful! I appreciate your welcoming me to Poetry Soup..Sorry it took me so long to respond...forget I had posted here!

Linda Pickron

Date: 10/21/2016 12:05:00 AM

Beautiful! I appreciate your welcoming me to Poetry Soup..Sorry it took me so long to respond...forget I had posted here!

Frank Black Blacharczyk

Date: 8/17/2016 3:36:00 PM

Sometimes the best lines come when we are kicking, screaming and then disappear when we look for paper and pen.

Redempta Asifiwe
Date: 5/16/2019 8:31:00 AM

I agree with you!

Al Juman

Date: 7/2/2016 3:48:00 AM

I am still here--I went no where NICE

Mara Prose

Date: 6/8/2016 6:07:00 AM

Very vivid and relatable! Love your poetry!

Messoh Vincent

Date: 5/11/2016 11:13:00 AM

So pictorial and heavily laden with imagery my dear...... Well written piece

Peter Walsh

Date: 4/7/2016 4:51:00 AM

It's good to vent, but not to dwell there Skat...

Ryan Vandenbosch

Date: 2/22/2016 1:10:00 AM

Well done

Funom Makama

Date: 1/19/2016 8:30:00 AM

Beautiful and well expressed lines in their finest. A great and well deserved 7

Len Gasun

Date: 1/15/2016 10:05:00 PM

Hello my dearest friend, Skat! Coming by to enjoy once again this amazing tanka of yours. Jealousy sometimes is hard to deal with..(a Big Sigh). Coming by also to Thank you heartily for stopping by on my poems and your constant support! I love you my dearest friend and sis Skat! me, Leonora

Omotosho Seth

Date: 1/10/2016 5:41:00 PM

"fire cracking bones " I love that line, every write-up was a hit back to back

Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/4/2016 5:08:00 PM

The creative mind is singing in this Tanka Skat. You always seem to come out with your own special way of putting the words down. You can paint such graphic imagery with your golden pen, even in such short work as a Tanka. Has to be a seven and a fave for this Tanka offers so much....Vladislav

Robyn Campbell

Date: 12/28/2015 8:55:00 AM

SKAT, whoa. I was there with you, my friend. From the first line. Learning from you.

Funom Makama

Date: 12/22/2015 7:50:00 AM

your discrete lines filled with sweet smelling ingredients so palatable to the mind are just beyond gratitude and appreciation. This page is a wonder and your poetry speaks volume of creativity beyond physical perspective. keep it up friend and this is definitely a 7.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 11/30/2015 6:22:00 AM

A feeling well captured.

Jordan Cote

Date: 11/27/2015 9:16:00 AM

Hey SKAT!!!!! thank you for leaving a comment on my first poem on here. This is very short, yet to the point, yet very emotional. Brilliant !

Eve Roper

Date: 11/10/2015 2:11:00 PM

Skat, words that bring tears. 11+++ Hugs Eve

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/6/2015 12:11:00 PM

"Tanka" for the poem! Terrible pun I know. This was vibrant with us seeing the snapshot of love lost, the pain. Excellent in showing the act of emotion in the feeling of jealousy. In just 22 words you conveyed heartbreak. That's a 7