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October 24, 2024

Poetry form: Minute Poem — The Minute Poem is a rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables, formatted in 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4 syllables. The rhyme scheme is aabb, ccdd, eeff. This is another poetry form not listed in PoetrySoup's "Types of Poems. As my October 2024 blog post mentioned, Brandy Nicole introduced me to the Minute Poem.

When I was very young, whenever I experienced something really great (presents, vacations, day trips, etc.), I would ask, "Mommy, am I in my eyes?" I guess as a child, that was my way of saying, `I must be dreaming.' And she would smile and say, "No, honey, this is real." And we'd laugh.

Image by Mark Toney using DALL-E (2024-10-24)

I'm In My Eyes

Life flows in cyclical rhythm
biorhythm
cycles of change
time rearrange

In prime of life what shall we choose?
Wear the best shoes?
Pies in the skies?
Wide open eyes!

Accepting that I'm getting old
my thoughts turn bold
less compromise
I'm in my eyes

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 10/25/2024 11:31:00 AM

Hello Mark, After reading this I feel older for some reason. LOL! I think you beautifully capture the cyclical nature of life and the boldness that comes with acceptance. The lines, "In prime of life what shall we choose? / Wear the best shoes? / Pies in the skies?" I feel it just wants to invite us to reflect on choices and perspectives as we age. Autumn Blessings, MY Friend, Daniel

Mark Toney
Date: 10/25/2024 12:56:00 PM

Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Daniel. Your thoughts remind me of Madeleine L'Engle's quote: "The great thing about getting older is that you don't lose all the other ages you've been." Perspective, perspective, perspective. ;-)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/24/2024 1:32:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your "I'm in my eyes" write. A child can see things in a different way. Love what your Mommy would say back to you. Time/age can change many things but think young/enjoy life... "Good Luck" Blessings on this Fall day..........

Mark Toney
Date: 10/24/2024 2:50:00 PM

Paula, what a sweet comment. You are always so kind. Love your “Time/age can change many things but think young/enjoy life.” Write on!

Jay Narain

Date: 10/24/2024 11:47:00 AM

Nicely penned.

Mark Toney
Date: 10/24/2024 2:27:00 PM

Much appreciated, Jay.

Jeff Kyser

Date: 10/24/2024 11:07:00 AM

Funny, I just ran across this form today. Gonna have to give it a try. Way to branch out, Mark!

Mark Toney
Date: 10/24/2024 11:12:00 AM

Thanks for the shout of encouragement, Jeff. I'll be on the lookout for your minute poem. FYI - It takes more than a minute to write! ;)

Deb M

Date: 10/24/2024 11:06:00 AM

Great poem so beautifully written Mark….the last stanza sums it up nicely…Debx

Mark Toney
Date: 10/24/2024 11:17:00 AM

Deb, thank you for your thoughtful comment. You are very encouraging.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/24/2024 10:40:00 AM

Dear Mark, its been a minute since ive last written a minute poem, and yours flow with seamless rhymes and one that gives an introspective touch too. I love the way youv expressed here in few syllables especially “ less compromise I'm in my eyes“! Touching ending especially knowing what it means as youv stated in your notes. How soulful! felt this one. Pleasure reading your poem. Sending you light

Mark Toney
Date: 10/24/2024 11:15:00 AM

Many thanks, Ink Empress; your gracious words have brightened my day!

I'm In My Eyes

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