I'M Empty

It always comes I lay down Everything is quiet And dark I breathe in I breathe out slowly I wait And it comes Praises, requests, love, thanksgiving It didn't come

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Elijah Prophet

Date: 5/9/2009 1:06:00 PM

laurie, we have been chosen by God Almighty to bear the weak, the poor, the needy, and the downtrodden upon our shoulders, because of our inner strength. Sometimes we must taste the bitter seed of emptiness, inorder that God, Himself fulfills us for all of them to draw from us. I love You Laurie. Elijah Prophet. What does Ogmosh means in the comment of Precious Sadie Grace?

Stephen Tate

Date: 2/25/2009 9:03:00 AM

Beautiful! I know how this feels!

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 1/30/2009 8:21:00 PM

If I hear you correctly it came but it didn't feel nearly as good as you'd hoped it would.

Lawrence Ingle

Date: 1/24/2009 10:37:00 PM

First of all I'm gonna praise you right now for your beautiful writing, and I'm gonna request another writing even if it's only half as pretty as this one, then I want to let you know how everyone here at poetry soup really loves you and all the wonderful thoughts your heart represents to us, and with the warmest of thanks I'm here giving this message to make sure that it did come....Good night....May God keep blessing you...Lawrence in Lou. Ky..

Robin L. Gass

Date: 1/24/2009 5:52:00 AM

Laurie, this is so sad but so wonderfully expressive. The last line speaks volumes. I can relate. Glad to hear my little ditty starded your day nicely! Love and hugs, Robin

Date: 1/22/2009 12:24:00 PM

Interesting piece to reflect on. Something about it drew me to read it again. Keep on writing! Have a good day. Karen

Frank F. Atanacio

Date: 1/22/2009 6:50:00 AM

maybe its out doing its taxes... Clever write well penned

Christopher Higgins

Date: 1/22/2009 4:05:00 AM

Laurie I just read your comments on Jamaica eyes poem and it had me laughing at 7:04 in Georgia..Sorry about the heavy tongue dude..lol.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/21/2009 6:06:00 PM

Ok I'm dense why is this funny? It makes me sad? Laurie? I interpeted it as saying you love you praise you give thanks and wait for it to be returned and it's not? I must be just tooooooooo blue today, today everything is blue. sigh Light & Love Debbie

Raul Moreno

Date: 1/21/2009 1:20:00 PM

Sad piece Laurie yet great work...Raul

Sharon Winter

Date: 1/21/2009 11:46:00 AM

This is sadly familiar. Between the title and your words I can relate. You captured empty so well. Love, Shar

James Foulk

Date: 1/21/2009 11:28:00 AM

a warm and heartfelt and very touching piece of well written poetry. thank you for reading my poem and for your kind comment.

Colin Mitchell Williams

Date: 1/21/2009 10:26:00 AM

Hi Laurie... such a sad piece Laurie, short, to the point, but echoes volumes on hope and expectation ... Thank you for your comment on Spooked

Christopher Higgins

Date: 1/21/2009 8:37:00 AM

The voice in this piece screams emptiness. The last two lines reveals a lot. Sad, effective writing.