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Illusive Dream

I fell~ asleep
It was easy to fall*
I slipped~ into a dream
When I couldn't get a grip*
.           ***         .

I hate WHAT you did to me..
Inside are things you can't see..
WHAT! 
Do you want me to PRETEND a smile?
I think I'll stay in my slumber of denial..

Like a pack of candy,
you where excited to open me up!
After a while you kept your mouth shut.
This Love Label came with NO WARNING sign.
WHAT happen to cloud nine?

Secretly you ended this.
With one broken KISS!
In the back of my mind when I close my eyes..
My thoughts are still searching for that one surprise..
A piece of puzzle in the making, 
The piece that will clear up my skies...

I can't live my life in peace...
Knowing my heart was filled up with your disease...
Like a dreamer you made me fall into deep...
Now I'm lost in a realm of sleep..
This dream has not expired,
I'm overdue when it comes to counting sheep..

This is only a bad dream?
Wake me up! 
Hear me scream!
WHAT! I'm not screaming?
Come on, I got to be dreaming! 
WHAT! 
Do you mean this isn't a dream?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Imtiaz Avatar
November 24, 2017 at 1:56 AM
Lovley dream "Secretly you ended this. With one broken KISS! In the back of my mind when I close my eyes.. My thoughts are still searching for that one surprise.." i like your way of turning your mind into words...........
Bohto Avatar
August 16, 2016 at 8:11 PM
Wow. Skat. You know about psychopathy. Thanks girl for supporting me. LOL
Johnson Avatar
July 9, 2016 at 8:33 AM
I really like this one SKAT A. Thank you for sharing.
Bankson Avatar
April 8, 2016 at 12:48 AM
I'm never going to sleep...My third most favorite thing to do....Great write as always.8.2
Max Avatar
January 13, 2016 at 6:08 PM
Thanks for contacting me SKAT. The Illusive Dream that faded so fast, don't dream of the future, nor either the past. Nice write!
Nope Avatar
December 25, 2015 at 4:25 AM
BEAUTIFUL
Subba Avatar
November 30, 2015 at 1:06 AM
its a dream SKAT A :)
Scars Avatar
November 14, 2015 at 12:05 PM
You have the most absolutely wonderful flow in all your poems. It reads like a song and how you capitalized a few words makes it more deep. Love this! 7 -LU Great job
Barchettadrive Avatar
November 3, 2015 at 5:57 PM
I dislike dreams like that SKAT! Love this write now! 7+
La France Avatar
August 14, 2015 at 7:32 PM
Skat, wow, what an amazing write, so full of emotion and pain dripped from every word A7 and thanks for visiting my poem, and the rains came
Devnath  Avatar
April 19, 2015 at 9:50 AM
Very nice poem of anger and love in love. Passionate words are beautifully colored in this exquisite poem. 7++ surely. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
Thomas Avatar
February 16, 2015 at 2:19 AM
Wow, strong poem, and I vcould feel the anger and pain in your words! Amazing write skat!! :)
Harris Avatar
July 14, 2014 at 12:12 PM
I know this pain and feel it clearly in your verse. I love it! Thank you!
May Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 3:06 PM
Great write Skat...putting the pieces of the puzzle together in your dream
Austin Avatar
February 4, 2014 at 3:42 PM
Bless your heart. Love Jayne
Watson Avatar
January 27, 2014 at 9:20 AM
A lot of hurt and anguish expressed in this piece, The dream of true love has proved illusive for many of us . I've come close a couple of times but it wasn't to be , I allowed work to rule my life for far too long but I'm still dreaming . Somewhere out there in this big wide world is the person I'm meant to be with . So however illusive Skat , Continue to dream.
Bunch Avatar
January 7, 2014 at 8:38 PM
The alternate reality that we live in, when outside of that once favored position. It's a dream like state, but more of a nightmare, but all nightmares eventually end. We sometimes feel a little fear about the reoccurring ones, but what time doesn't erase, I can't finish because I am now inspired to wirte something lol. Oh what the heck, the things that time doesn't erase, and that love can't replace, really aren't good for us anyway. They don't allow us to grow, they imprison us, I think?
Dunn Avatar
November 20, 2013 at 6:21 PM
Spooky and sad, nicely done, and thank you for your comment on win.
Poet Avatar
October 24, 2013 at 8:51 AM
HEY HI SKAT HOW ARE YOU
Poet Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 12:41 PM
HEY HI Skat i am Mahima from India thanks a lot for commenting for my poem and even your poem is just wow i loved it and i am studying in 11
Byte Avatar
October 12, 2013 at 10:42 AM
Wow I can feel your emotion in this Skat.I really like it
Wash Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 7:02 PM
Thank you for welcoming me to Poetrysoup. Illusive dream was real to me because I've had a similiar dream. Catchy poem; good work
Deschler Avatar
August 28, 2013 at 1:22 PM
I absolutely love this poem, SKAT! I can relate to this completely..... Sometimes our worst nightmares happen to us when we are awake....Thank you for all of your encouraging comments on my work. I really appreciate it!
Vivi Avatar
July 21, 2013 at 10:30 PM
I liked it! Truthfully, I think dreams are a way to escape reality, but I suppose they can imprison a person as well. I liked this one ^_^ dreams can become lovely too or nightmares.
Hadden Avatar
July 10, 2013 at 12:48 PM
An excellent write. I loved every line of it. Thank you Skat for the nice review of my writing as well. Roger Dale Hadden.
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