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Poetic Form: Haibun

Inspired: 2023 December 06

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Shadows are constant like a friend, but unlike a natural friend, shadows do not bear human emotions, or traits, which offers clarity and understanding. That is what makes shadows powerful, for it's not vulnerable to the frailties of human emotions that openly display individual weaknesses, where those who have control of said emotions can wield them to their advantage whereas the weaker willed individual, will succumb to theirs. hungry and thirsty solutions need to address address replace need Intellect is my shadow and friend as neither will cause harm to my person. Harm befalls the unheeding, an act caused by intellectual abandonment, thus, my shadow observes the folly and acts as a reminder and sets it to memory. the moon makes a night the sun makes a day and I make the sun and moon The church has a shadow, where I share familial upbringing as the intro factor, thus, 'A recent change of mind/acquired conviction', befalls upon longstanding, albeit, not 'belief' as it is subjective. I cast objective reasoning based on juvenile tendencies of a rebellious nature, but not a typical juvie as I toss intellect into the mix. sensed observations deduced logical outcomes impacts life status Present day, and counting ... The church and the families of my life, along with their shadows are now parted. I trust that the subjective beliefs that they held while in their lifetimes, they are all there now in the afterlife. Now, my intellect serves a greater part of my life as the shared shadows no longer reflects upon me, but not a smidgen less from my heart, soul, and mind. As my intellect moves with validation and purposed fulfilment, I believe I'm reflecting my intentions ... until my shadow advises change ... once a family a singularity now The Word waits for one

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/6/2023 2:06:00 PM

WOW!!!! What a Haibun write. Your pen was working overtime on this. I enjoyed reading this one. Have a wonderful day writing away..............

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/6/2023 3:07:00 PM

My gratitude of some depth, appreciate your extended courtesies, Paula. Favor for favor, blessings for blessing, they go on unrealized, until ... look forward to your betters, my friend ... Aloha, William

Ink Empress

Date: 12/6/2023 4:30:00 AM

What a profound and deeply meaningful haibun this is. It made me think so much and definitely is a very intellectual write that requires thorough reading to fully grasp all that which you’ve conveyed in such a creative manner but i must highlight these lines that stood out for me the most “the moon makes a night the sun makes a day and I make the sun and moon” what a brilliant haiku! I love that! Pleasure reading always your work. The ending sums up all that which youv expressed here.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/6/2023 7:43:00 AM

I'm delighted by your visiting words, Ink Empress. The sun and moon pleasure our sky at their appointed hours, ruling day and night separately however, when they appear together, they become ecliptic--a shadow in the sky. Thus, I am them, and they are me. I hope that helps. Admirable commentary that encourages, my friend. Aloha, William