Raul Moreno Poet Ottava rima

Igniting Love's Flame

Beyond cloister walls surrounding my heart,
   Lies the deep well of my immortal tears.
Shrouded by darkness while cloaked by love’s art,
   My crimson heart’s trapped in my body’s mere.
Chambers of tissue with dungeons so stark,
   Defeat the challenge on each tier.

        Rescue me, from loneliness’ grand sea,
        Come conquer my love and set my heart free,

I’m warming up from the shivering cold,
   Tangled up in my sheets of solitude.
You’re igniting my flame deep in my soul,
   The closer you get, my heart’s in the nude.
As shadows dance to flickering hot coals,
   Come liberate me from being so prude.

        You’re a goddess of knight fighting for me,
        A maiden of pride with fairness to thee.

Liberation is key, in love’s sole reign,
   As you swiftly battle to win my love.
The things we face are inflicting sharp pains,
   For those are the struggles we face because,
It’s worth fighting for the ones we belove,
   Nothing amounts to that happiness gained.

        It’s you who conquered love, stealing my heart,
        Unchained my captive soul for a new start.



Inspired by The Contest of New Terrains by Matt Caliri

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Debbie Guzzi August 27, 2009 at 4:51 PM so nice to see you write with lots of words!!!! Light & Love

Debbie Guzzi July 23, 2009 at 4:46 PM Nice effort here, keep those words flowing! Light & Love

Kushal Poddar July 15, 2009 at 10:15 AM This is a complex pattern and needs careful pricision. You have excelled at it and without leaving us from the track that is your theme.

Michael Jordan July 15, 2009 at 8:34 AM Raul this is truly a excellent write in a rare form that I have never personally seen - good luck in the contest - God Bless, MJ

Sara Kendrick July 14, 2009 at 2:28 PM I enjoyed reading your Ottava rima

Brian Strand July 14, 2009 at 1:43 AM Best wishes with this one Raul.Love the couplet together they make a fine poem as well.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today

Carolyn Devonshire July 13, 2009 at 4:16 PM I must agree with James. This is a new style for you, Raul, and I find it very romantic and compelling. Nice work! Carolyn

James Fraser July 13, 2009 at 2:21 PM A quite different side to your normal writes Raul, and a joy to read>>James

Charlene Bird July 13, 2009 at 1:50 PM Writing about love is definitely a challenge you certainly move on and above that friend, this is beautiful and the emotional proportions are excellent.

Carrie Richards July 13, 2009 at 11:09 AM This is an excellent poem...a form I haven't tried. Thank you for inspiring me to challenge myself. Lovely work! ~ Carrie

Christopher Higgins July 13, 2009 at 7:39 AM You are an amazing writer my friend and I love the love flowing in this write...Liberation is key in love sole reign...awesome line.

Charmaine Chircop July 13, 2009 at 7:24 AM i love your senryus and haikus but when you write love its even better ,you write it with a pen of passion--whilst reading this poem my thoughts were of a special person who stole my heart,an honest and good person,thanks for reminding me through your verses how beautiful love is when we conquer it and never to let it go--great write Raul--charma:)

Sean Kelly July 13, 2009 at 4:41 AM The versitile Raul strikes again . He is igniting and has lift-off , to a new terrain . Excellent piece .....

John Patrick Robbins Aka Gonzo July 13, 2009 at 4:27 AM Really my favorite poem Ive read of yours great lines incredible flow to it. Really justva different kind of poem alltogather really like this write Raul good work

Yvette Deem July 13, 2009 at 1:53 AM your poetry is so beautiful, i can only hope to aspire to pen something that touches others as yours touch me. thank you for sharing your art. yvette