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Quote: "If you only knew all the love that I found, it's hard to keep my soul on the ground".--Bradley Nowell In the realm of reverie, where roses bloom, Whispers weave wonders in the wistful gloom. If only you knew, like a lark's sweet tune, Secrets soar silently 'neath the silver moon. In the labyrinth of longing, where shadows sway, Whispers of wishes waltz in the moon's soft ray. If only you knew, like petals in a ballet, Love's secrets linger in the night's display. In the tapestry of time, where dreams take flight, Echoes of eternity enchant the starry night. If only you knew, like a comet's fiery might, Love's celestial dance, an endless delight. In the symphony of sighs, where souls entwine, Whispers of yearning in the heart's design. If only you knew, like grapes on the vine, Love's nectar flows in the sweetest wine. In the garden of the heart, where secrets bloom, If only you knew, like a rose's perfume. In the dance of desire, where shadows loom, Love's whispers linger in the twilight's gloom.

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Date: 5/16/2024 7:57:00 PM
Wow..... a beautiful poem portraying the intimacy of hearts in love. This highly alliterative piece is remarkable in its fluidity of passion and sweetness of rhyming. "In the labyrinth of longing, where shadows sway, Whispers of wishes waltz in the moon's soft ray." These lines are not only alliterative, but very poetic too
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Date: 5/16/2024 10:23:00 AM
This poetry is an exquisite and sentimental piece that eloquently portrays the myriad marvels of love, Vijay. Check Soupmail
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Date: 5/15/2024 6:57:00 PM
Wonderful, romantic poetry Jay… Beryl
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Date: 5/15/2024 5:26:00 PM
This is a beautiful, romantic poem that tells of the many wonders of love. Thank you for this keepsake poem.
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Date: 5/15/2024 3:11:00 PM
Very nicely done. It kind of resembled a kyrielle or quatern. The way the key line was repeated.
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Date: 5/14/2024 8:31:00 PM
An absolutely beautiful poem, Jay. So soft and spiritual.
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Date: 5/14/2024 4:48:00 PM
a captivating romance poem, Jay. Repeating 'if only you knew' added continuity and structure to your poem. I liked the fluidity and rhyme scheme as well. I especially liked: If only you knew, like a comet's fiery might, Love's celestial dance, an endless delight." I believe this to be a great contest contender. Wishing you a pleasant evening, Sara
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Date: 5/14/2024 2:04:00 PM
Beautiful whispers of love--a lovely romantic poem, Jay.
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Date: 5/14/2024 12:13:00 PM
Jay, your poetry is very exquisite. I derived much pleasure from reading this particular piece. Wishing you success in the contest
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Date: 5/14/2024 11:28:00 AM
What a lovely write/story. I  enjoyed reading this one. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have A Blessed Day Writing Away.........
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