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If Only You Knew

Once upon a time, not so long ago.
If only you knew, my spirit reflected
The greenery of nature and It's cooling
On that balmy day. You carefully laid me
Down beneath spilled cerulean and crimson sky
And moving clouds; a fervent morning sunlight
Sheltered under rustling, verdant umbrella
Of trees. On a sparse, herbaceous aroma,
Bed of grass. You cupped my head in your hand,
A small kiss you had laid on my forehead;
When we were together, you and I.
The comforting love of affection.
A perfect moment whilst the world breathed
And the clouds gathered to quench the storm.

A serenity I would love to see return,
But those fluttering autumnal color leaves 
And spill crimson sky; also mourn for you and me.


10/23/2020


Battle Of Most Acclaimed 2020 Poems Poetry Contest
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Hamilton Avatar
January 8, 2021 at 12:03 PM
Very nice read, congrats Eve on another win!
Ray Choudhury Avatar
October 27, 2020 at 3:30 PM
Dear Eve, Read this poem a few times even before the placement, and reading it again. Congratulations on your top win, it's a beautiful poignant poem. Love, Mala
Watt Avatar
October 27, 2020 at 3:27 PM
Eve, another beauty from your talented pen. Congratulations on your 1st place win! Hugs ~ John
Callus Avatar
October 27, 2020 at 1:07 PM
Congratulations on placing first, Eve!! This poem is beautiful, with touches of sadness and longing. a fav for me! Hugs // paul
Pandit Avatar
October 27, 2020 at 6:23 AM
Back with BIG congrats on your first place win, Eve.
Kindness Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:06 PM
Congratulation on your win
Agustin Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 8:58 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... delighting me with, "The greenery of nature and its cooling on that balmy day." Thanks likewise for my placement in your recent contest. God bless you.
Seeker Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 8:10 PM
Poignant! Piercing! Perfect! Congrats!
Rose  Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 6:39 PM
Oh, you make the pen bleed and the heart feel with this splendidly written saga of love and loss. A big congrats dear heart, for this amazing poem. love xo
Koplin Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 5:13 PM
Congratulations on your top win!
Balasubramanian Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 11:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win. Great write indeed. Enjoy your top win. Take care, Hugs Rama
Johnson Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 10:21 AM
Congratulation, Eve. Simply beautiful.
Ranaweera  Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 10:15 AM
Congratulations, Eve, on this well-deserving Top Win for your beautiful poetic piece!!
Edmonds  Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 10:00 AM
Beautiful descriptive poetry Eve, congratulations on your first place win, Belle
Dutta Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:51 AM
BIG CONGRATS to win TOP.
Y. Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:29 AM
Hi Eve, This is a good entry! I found it romantic with a touch of sadness. Wonderful imagery and content. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved. Have great day my friend :-) Alexis
Andresen Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:21 AM
- Woow ... one first place ... and it went to you, Eve :) - A wonderful poem, well deserved my friend ... Congratulations so much :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Mcintosh Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:19 AM
Love this!!! Bless you
Mcintosh Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:19 AM
Congratulations too
One Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 9:03 AM
This poem is full of vibrancy and vivid imagery and youve done justice to this image..It has a touch of sadness, of a loved one that will never return... Beautiful poetry.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
Pandit Avatar
October 24, 2020 at 6:24 AM
Wonderfully evocative write, Eve. No doubt a winning poem.
Buhagiar Avatar
October 23, 2020 at 11:06 PM
In our senior lives we yearn for serenity which is so elusive. ~~
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