If I Invite You

If I invite you to come and join me on a merry-go-round,past this sky's blue, will you join me to find that childhood key, if I invite you? Our unicorn dream to touch rainbow's hue again on dragon's back to be carefree on that wingless horse a journey long due our childhood merry-go-round,come join me! Somewhere must be there, the days once we knew beyond this mundane life come and let us see, if I invite you! By -kash poet contest-Carousel in Roundel Sponsor--Nette Onclaud Date--13th August 2013 =================000================== The ROUNDEL is a deritave of rondeau and rondine... It has eleven lines constructed from two quatrains, and a triplet. The rhyme scheme only has two rhymes and a refrain from the first phrase of first line, thus, the second line rhymes with the refrain:.. a. b. a.B . b. a. b . a. b. a. B.. =================000===================
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Mohammed Avatar
September 3, 2013 at 6:01 AM
This is truly another great gem Kash. Well done once more.
Onclaud Avatar
August 21, 2013 at 7:27 AM
wow, kash.. a tender invite.. .congrats on your win in my contetst, and do comment on my blog.. i wrote about you in general..:) huggs!
A  Avatar
August 20, 2013 at 8:58 PM
Kash, congratulations in the CAROUSEL IN ROUNDEL contest...SKAT
Kendrick Avatar
August 20, 2013 at 4:41 PM
Enjoyed reading your winning work..Congrats on your great win..Sara
Chircop Avatar
August 20, 2013 at 2:49 PM
I would love to travel back in time to such journey..What a beauty.You were born a poet.
Lamoureux Avatar
August 20, 2013 at 8:24 AM
Fantastic Job! Congrats
Roberts Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 11:50 PM
Kash congrats .....Seren
Mannan Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 10:55 PM
Many congrats on your win. A wonderful write.
Morgan Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 7:40 PM
Congrats on your win. Morgan
Richards Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 6:58 PM
So far ...one of my favorites !!! Nicely done, Kash !!
A   Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 4:37 PM
Hi Kash, Thanks for the wonderful "CAROUSEL" ride.... Congratulations with your winning poem in Nette's contest. always & forever *PD :-)
Guzzi Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 3:52 PM
Do they have them in India? Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Dietrich Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 3:03 PM
so great to see you on this winners' list, Kash. Congratulations to you.
Sivey Avatar
August 14, 2013 at 10:27 PM
This is a very awesome and wondrous write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this phenomenal poem this evening! You have presented a glorious piece here, I believe you knew this theme! You will do very well in the contest! Great Work!!
Onclaud Avatar
August 14, 2013 at 3:35 PM
hellllo!..:)
Dietrich Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 10:35 PM
by tone, I meant that the theme brings out the same "feeling" of happiness and of sharing a ride with someone!!
Nair Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 8:17 PM
Entertaining write, cute one, Kash!!
Bauer Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 4:01 PM
i love the playful tone of this poem and the repeated invitation. nice job!
Dietrich Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 3:10 PM
this is awesomely done, Kash!!! It was rather a bit like mine in its tone!! I see a high score coming to you!! thanks for making me aware what I did with mine. I was not thinking.
Onclaud Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 12:28 PM
awwwh, how nice of you, kashi...see you on my page?..;) huggles
Andresen Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 12:19 PM
- If you invite me .... I will come ... :)) - A very well written poem, Kash! - Luck in contest !! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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