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If I Invite you

If I invite you to come and join me on a merry-go-round,past this sky's blue, will you join me to find that childhood key, if I invite you? Our unicorn dream to touch rainbow's hue again on dragon's back to be carefree on that wingless horse a journey long due our childhood merry-go-round,come join me! Somewhere must be there, the days once we knew beyond this mundane life come and let us see, if I invite you! By -kash poet contest-Carousel in Roundel Sponsor--Nette Onclaud Date--13th August 2013 =================000================== The ROUNDEL is a deritave of rondeau and rondine... It has eleven lines constructed from two quatrains, and a triplet. The rhyme scheme only has two rhymes and a refrain from the first phrase of first line, thus, the second line rhymes with the refrain:.. a. b. a.B . b. a. b . a. b. a. B.. =================000===================
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Date: 9/3/2013 6:01:00 AM
This is truly another great gem Kash. Well done once more.
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Date: 8/21/2013 7:27:00 AM
wow, kash.. a tender invite.. .congrats on your win in my contetst, and do comment on my blog.. i wrote about you in general..:) huggs!
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Date: 8/20/2013 8:58:00 PM
Kash, congratulations in the CAROUSEL IN ROUNDEL contest...SKAT
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Date: 8/20/2013 4:41:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your winning work..Congrats on your great win..Sara
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Date: 8/20/2013 2:49:00 PM
I would love to travel back in time to such journey..What a beauty.You were born a poet.
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Date: 8/20/2013 8:24:00 AM
Fantastic Job! Congrats
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Date: 8/19/2013 11:50:00 PM
Kash congrats .....Seren
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Date: 8/19/2013 10:55:00 PM
Many congrats on your win. A wonderful write.
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Date: 8/19/2013 7:40:00 PM
Congrats on your win. Morgan
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Date: 8/19/2013 6:58:00 PM
So far ...one of my favorites !!! Nicely done, Kash !!
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Date: 8/19/2013 4:37:00 PM
Hi Kash, Thanks for the wonderful "CAROUSEL" ride.... Congratulations with your winning poem in Nette's contest. always & forever *PD :-)
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Date: 8/19/2013 3:52:00 PM
Do they have them in India? Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 8/19/2013 3:03:00 PM
so great to see you on this winners' list, Kash. Congratulations to you.
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Date: 8/14/2013 10:27:00 PM
This is a very awesome and wondrous write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this phenomenal poem this evening! You have presented a glorious piece here, I believe you knew this theme! You will do very well in the contest! Great Work!!
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Date: 8/14/2013 3:35:00 PM
hellllo!..:)
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Date: 8/13/2013 10:35:00 PM
by tone, I meant that the theme brings out the same "feeling" of happiness and of sharing a ride with someone!!
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Date: 8/13/2013 8:17:00 PM
Entertaining write, cute one, Kash!!
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Date: 8/13/2013 4:01:00 PM
i love the playful tone of this poem and the repeated invitation. nice job!
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Date: 8/13/2013 3:10:00 PM
this is awesomely done, Kash!!! It was rather a bit like mine in its tone!! I see a high score coming to you!! thanks for making me aware what I did with mine. I was not thinking.
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Date: 8/13/2013 12:28:00 PM
awwwh, how nice of you, kashi...see you on my page?..;) huggles
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Date: 8/13/2013 12:19:00 PM
- If you invite me .... I will come ... :)) - A very well written poem, Kash! - Luck in contest !! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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