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If I Could Go Back - Collaboration

The challenge was to add one stanza into the sponsor's poem. This was my favorite one that he showed. I have italized the last stanza to show it is the little part that I added to Charles Messina's poem "If I Could Go Back": As I'm looking through my window And I start to l look around All the snow has melted I see toys left on the ground A basket ball, a whiffle ball A glove and baseball bat A dirty lone blue mitten And a cotton ball wool hat Candy wrappers and soda caps And a witches old corn broom And underneath the swing set Was a busted red balloon Footsteps from the children Left imprinted in the dirt And in the leafless branchy bush Was a little boys lost shirt Those times when we were children Sometimes bad and sometimes good I'd go back there in a heartbeat If I thought that I just could A dirty lone blue mitten And a cotton ball wool hat A basket ball, a whiffle ball A glove and a baseball bat And underneath the swing set Was a busted red balloon Candy wrappers and soda caps And a witches old corn broom And in the leafless branchy bush Was a little boys lost shirt Footsteps from the children Left imprinted in the dirt Those times when we were children Sometimes bad and sometimes good I'd go back there in a heartbeat If I thought that I just could I’d don the cotton ball wool hat and give the whiffle ball a whack. Then loud and strong I’d raise my voice as friends and brothers I’d call back! Aug. 21, 2018 for Charles Messina's Add A Stanza To My Poem Poetry Contest Note: Here is a link to his poem. There you can see an interesting bio that goes with it . He grew up with many siblings just like I did. https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/if_i_could_go_back_1012017

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Date: 8/29/2018 4:13:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work ..Way to go.. Sara
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Date: 8/28/2018 5:49:00 PM
Buy your ticket and get on board... to go back, of course. Congrats on your win, Andrea! ~ Gershon
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Date: 8/28/2018 3:03:00 PM
Love your addition to Charlie's poem, Andrea...Congratulations on your 2nd place win!
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Date: 8/28/2018 8:43:00 AM
Nice ending Andrea..Congrats on your win..
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Date: 8/28/2018 7:25:00 AM
Andrea, I can't tell you how much I love the stanza you added to my poem. You nailed it perfectly. Also, thank you for adding the bio along with it, that's a beautiful thing. So much enjoyed! Thanks for entering my contest and a huge congratulations on your win! Charlie :)
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Date: 8/28/2018 3:39:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea on your win. Great addition to the poem.
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Date: 8/23/2018 6:31:00 PM
Hiya Petal, I think this is the first time I’ve ever been the first to comment on any poem,yay at last lol. I do share the sentiment of the writers poem and your addition, though I was always taught to put my toys etc away. There are many things we’d all love to do over again. Take care, Richard
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/26/2018 4:02:00 PM
thanks for being the only one to comment, Richard. I hope the sponsor of the contest likes it enough to place it. I had to post up four poems at once before my little trip to Chicago and it was for sure gonna be hardly read!!

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