If I Could Go Back - Collaboration

(first 9 stanzas by Charles Messina, Sponsor)

As I'm looking through my window 
And I start to l look around
All the snow has melted 
I see toys left on the ground
 
A basket ball, a whiffle ball 
A glove and baseball bat 
A dirty lone blue mitten 
And a cotton ball wool hat
 
Candy wrappers and soda caps 
And a witches old corn broom 
And underneath the swing set 
Was a busted red balloon
 
Footsteps from the children 
Left imprinted in the dirt 
And in the leafless branchy bush 
Was a little boys lost shirt
 
Those times when we were children 
Sometimes bad and sometimes good 
I'd go back there in a heartbeat 
If I thought that I just could
 
A dirty lone blue mitten 
And a cotton ball wool hat 
A basket ball, a whiffle ball
A glove and a baseball bat
 
And underneath the swing set 
Was a busted red balloon 
Candy wrappers and soda caps 
And a witches old corn broom
 
And in the leafless branchy bush 
Was a little boys lost shirt 
Footsteps from the children 
Left imprinted in the dirt
 
Those times when we were children 
Sometimes bad and sometimes good 
I'd go back there in a heartbeat 
If I thought that I just could

Those olden days were simple then
We kids were merry with our ways
Of playing in our tiny yard
Where laughter, fun, made happy days.


Sandra M. Haight

~2nd Place~
Contest: Add A Stanza To My Poem
Sponsor: Charles Messina
Added For Contest:  Last Stanza, #10
Judged: 08/27/2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 8/29/2018 4:13:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work ..Way to go.. Sara
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:56:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sara, for your visit and supportive comments! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 8/28/2018 3:06:00 PM
Love your addition to Charlie's poem, Sandra..Congratulations on your win!
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:55:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Eve! Much appreciated! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 8/28/2018 1:46:00 PM
Yes, back in those days... They were the best memories :) Congratulations Sandra on your win :) x
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:55:00 PM
Yes, for sure, Francesca! Thanks for your visit, congrats and lovely comments! Hugs, Sandra :)
Date: 8/28/2018 7:37:00 AM
Sandra, I have to tell you, this is also one of my faves for sure. An absolute perfect ending to the poem. Thank you so much for entering my contest and Congratulations on your well deserved win! Charlie :)
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:53:00 PM
Thank you, Charlie, for your contest that offered something different in having to add to your already nostalgic poem. I am so pleased that you liked what I wrote, and I appreciate my nice placement and your supportive comments and congrats very much! Sandra :)
Date: 8/28/2018 3:41:00 AM
Congratulations, Sandra on yuor win.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:54:00 PM
Thank you so much, Subimal! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 8/11/2018 1:33:00 AM
Seen some great collaboration's of Charlie's Poems, this us another. Tom
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:54:00 PM
Thank you very much, Tom! Much appreciated! Sandra :)
Date: 8/10/2018 9:30:00 PM
This collaboration has become so sweet and charming. Loved your lines Sandra. : )
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:53:00 PM
Thank you so much, Connie! It was fun to work on! Hugs, Sandra
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