If a Goodbye Echoes

If a goodbye echoes when you say hello 
And tears concealed admonish your smile
As life abandons you without hinting why,
Did you miss the sound of her silent cries?

If you need to ask how long does love last
You haven't heard the moan of her heart
Where quietly she hides grief of her wants
And quelling her passion, embraces doubts.

Her sadden vibes don't well-up your eyes
And the sound of her hurt just passes you by
As contemptuous voice ridicules her plight,

What it wouldn't say, you certainly have. 

March 22, 2019
HM: Strand select 5 contest by Brian Strand

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 2/2/2022 6:25:00 AM
Without drama and with no exaggeration you have unraveled the resentment in an aching heart, which for long suppressed its sobs. When her hurt look and moistened eyes didn't create any empathetic response in the lover, a hello from him may echo back as a goodbye from her. Powerful presentation of sentiments !
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Date: 1/7/2020 9:53:00 PM
Sincere congratulations for your Honorable Mention in Brian's contest, Vijay - keep the ink flowing, my friend, and best wishes for a bountiful and healthy New Year. Blessings! :o)
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Date: 4/12/2019 3:22:00 PM
Congrats on being in the top 100 new poems!
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Date: 4/5/2019 11:27:00 PM
A relationship that ends right after it starts; cool poem -JT
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Date: 3/29/2019 7:46:00 PM
This poem catches me as it seems to reveal healing from a deep wound or does it? The first two stanzas seem to talk of grief. The last of contempt. The ever pulling opposite of emotions in the ending of a love? This is a favorite for me, Vijay. Really well written. Deb
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Date: 3/29/2019 10:33:00 AM
Love the first verse...what a beautiful way to express love and loss. Vickie
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Date: 3/29/2019 1:27:00 AM
Hi Vijay, Someone deserved your subtle response and you gave it so poetically and gracefully. Great poem Vijay, All the best and hugs, Jenny.
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Date: 3/27/2019 9:35:00 AM
Vijay, very emotional and a very good write. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/27/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thank you Eve.
Date: 3/27/2019 6:42:00 AM
Such a deep poetry. Enjoyed this emotional write.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/27/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thank you Supraja.
Date: 3/26/2019 6:14:00 PM
wow, this is a very poignant one, Vijay. Very nicely done.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/27/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thank you Andrea.
Date: 3/25/2019 3:17:00 PM
vijay, thanks for parking on my page... where are you?.. huggs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/26/2019 9:25:00 AM
A new poem coming soon..thanks friend.
Date: 3/24/2019 7:23:00 PM
Fell instantly into total 'enthrall' with your write and its intensity kicked out of the ballpark on the last 2 lines. EXCELLENT. You poetically socked it to somebody, big time - impressive poem. All the best ... CayCay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/25/2019 7:37:00 AM
Such delight to read your feedback..much appreciate your visit..many thanks CayCay.
Date: 3/24/2019 5:14:00 PM
WoW! Excellent . So well written. Love the last line. It sums it all up.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/25/2019 7:36:00 AM
Many thanks Allen..much appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 3/24/2019 3:48:00 PM
Sad and eloquent Vijay...have a wonderful day :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/25/2019 7:36:00 AM
Thank you Chris..much appreciate.
Date: 3/24/2019 7:12:00 AM
Nothing hurts like a sad goodbye.. your poem is full of sadness..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/24/2019 8:08:00 AM
True..many thanks SO for your visit and comments.
Date: 3/24/2019 5:03:00 AM
Painfully incisive, Vijay, very good write.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/24/2019 8:08:00 AM
Thank you my friend..appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 3/23/2019 8:05:00 PM
Something to think about, indeed; well penned, thought provoking and a wonderful read.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/24/2019 8:07:00 AM
Much appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks, MLK.
Date: 3/23/2019 12:21:00 PM
This one is very deep, and very beautiful, Vijay! Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:37:00 PM
Happy to read your comments Janice..much appreciate your visit..many thanks.
Date: 3/23/2019 10:59:00 AM
Who truly knows the wells of the deep when it comes to another broken heart. Your poetry shows that you have a very high emotive soul that expresses it so well. Have a wonderful day dear Vij, xo
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:36:00 PM
You said it well my friend..much appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks.
Date: 3/23/2019 10:14:00 AM
Deep and pain-filled poem, Vijay:)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:35:00 PM
Pain filled it is..many thanks Jo for your visit and comments.
Date: 3/23/2019 10:09:00 AM
WoW! Excellent advice and so well written. Love the last line. It sums it all up. A fine write. God Bless, JB
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:35:00 PM
I am happy to read your feedback Judy..much appreciate..many thanks.
Date: 3/23/2019 10:07:00 AM
Interesting lines penned. I can see it is speaks of a deep relationship gone wrong. Thanks for dropping by. Sara
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:34:00 PM
Yes it did go wrong..many thanks Sara for your visit and comments.
Date: 3/23/2019 6:36:00 AM
Nice one... you had me thinking there...a life write...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:33:00 PM
Thank you Arturo..much appreciate.
Date: 3/23/2019 4:51:00 AM
The first line says it well Vijay, love is long lost by then...Great write
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:33:00 PM
So true Joseph..many thanks for the kind feedback.
Date: 3/22/2019 7:54:00 PM
To feel the heart of another- so deeply, one would know its beat, even before a breath is taken. "What it wouldn't say, you certainly have" Exactly. Your thoughts move me. They always do. ~ Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:32:00 PM
Glad you focused on the ending line..appreciate your kind feedback as always..enjoyed reading your comments..many thanks Brandy.
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