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If a Goodbye Echoes

If a goodbye echoes when you say hello And tears concealed admonish your smile As life abandons you without hinting why, Did you miss the sound of her silent cries? If you need to ask how long does love last You haven't heard the moan of her heart Where quietly she hides grief of her wants And quelling her passion, embraces doubts. Her sadden vibes don't well-up your eyes And the sound of her hurt just passes you by As contemptuous voice ridicules her plight, What it wouldn't say, you certainly have. March 22, 2019 HM: Strand select 5 contest by Brian Strand

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Valsa George

Date: 2/2/2022 6:25:00 AM

Without drama and with no exaggeration you have unraveled the resentment in an aching heart, which for long suppressed its sobs. When her hurt look and moistened eyes didn't create any empathetic response in the lover, a hello from him may echo back as a goodbye from her. Powerful presentation of sentiments !

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 1/7/2020 9:53:00 PM

Sincere congratulations for your Honorable Mention in Brian's contest, Vijay - keep the ink flowing, my friend, and best wishes for a bountiful and healthy New Year. Blessings! :o)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/12/2019 3:22:00 PM

Congrats on being in the top 100 new poems!

Honestly J.T.

Date: 4/5/2019 11:27:00 PM

A relationship that ends right after it starts; cool poem -JT

Deb Radke

Date: 3/29/2019 7:46:00 PM

This poem catches me as it seems to reveal healing from a deep wound or does it? The first two stanzas seem to talk of grief. The last of contempt. The ever pulling opposite of emotions in the ending of a love? This is a favorite for me, Vijay. Really well written. Deb

Vickie Hurtt - Thayer

Date: 3/29/2019 10:33:00 AM

Love the first verse...what a beautiful way to express love and loss. Vickie

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/29/2019 1:27:00 AM

Hi Vijay, Someone deserved your subtle response and you gave it so poetically and gracefully. Great poem Vijay, All the best and hugs, Jenny.

Eve Roper

Date: 3/27/2019 9:35:00 AM

Vijay, very emotional and a very good write. Hugs Eve ~`*

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/27/2019 9:57:00 AM

Thank you Eve.

Supraja Kannan

Date: 3/27/2019 6:42:00 AM

Such a deep poetry. Enjoyed this emotional write.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/27/2019 9:57:00 AM

Thank you Supraja.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/26/2019 6:14:00 PM

wow, this is a very poignant one, Vijay. Very nicely done.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/27/2019 9:57:00 AM

Thank you Andrea.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/25/2019 3:17:00 PM

vijay, thanks for parking on my page... where are you?.. huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/26/2019 9:25:00 AM

A new poem coming soon..thanks friend.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/24/2019 7:23:00 PM

Fell instantly into total 'enthrall' with your write and its intensity kicked out of the ballpark on the last 2 lines. EXCELLENT. You poetically socked it to somebody, big time - impressive poem. All the best ... CayCay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/25/2019 7:37:00 AM

Such delight to read your feedback..much appreciate your visit..many thanks CayCay.

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

Date: 3/24/2019 5:14:00 PM

WoW! Excellent . So well written. Love the last line. It sums it all up.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/25/2019 7:36:00 AM

Many thanks Allen..much appreciate your visit and comments.

Chris Hagy

Date: 3/24/2019 3:48:00 PM

Sad and eloquent Vijay...have a wonderful day :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/25/2019 7:36:00 AM

Thank you Chris..much appreciate.

Silent One

Date: 3/24/2019 7:12:00 AM

Nothing hurts like a sad goodbye.. your poem is full of sadness..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/24/2019 8:08:00 AM

True..many thanks SO for your visit and comments.

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 3/24/2019 5:03:00 AM

Painfully incisive, Vijay, very good write.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/24/2019 8:08:00 AM

Thank you my friend..appreciate your visit and comments.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 3/23/2019 8:05:00 PM

Something to think about, indeed; well penned, thought provoking and a wonderful read.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/24/2019 8:07:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks, MLK.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/23/2019 12:21:00 PM

This one is very deep, and very beautiful, Vijay! Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:37:00 PM

Happy to read your comments Janice..much appreciate your visit..many thanks.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 3/23/2019 10:59:00 AM

Who truly knows the wells of the deep when it comes to another broken heart. Your poetry shows that you have a very high emotive soul that expresses it so well. Have a wonderful day dear Vij, xo

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:36:00 PM

You said it well my friend..much appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/23/2019 10:14:00 AM

Deep and pain-filled poem, Vijay:)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:35:00 PM

Pain filled it is..many thanks Jo for your visit and comments.

Judy Ball

Date: 3/23/2019 10:09:00 AM

WoW! Excellent advice and so well written. Love the last line. It sums it all up. A fine write. God Bless, JB

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:35:00 PM

I am happy to read your feedback Judy..much appreciate..many thanks.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/23/2019 10:07:00 AM

Interesting lines penned. I can see it is speaks of a deep relationship gone wrong. Thanks for dropping by. Sara

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:34:00 PM

Yes it did go wrong..many thanks Sara for your visit and comments.

Arturo Michael

Date: 3/23/2019 6:36:00 AM

Nice one... you had me thinking there...a life write...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:33:00 PM

Thank you Arturo..much appreciate.

Joseph May

Date: 3/23/2019 4:51:00 AM

The first line says it well Vijay, love is long lost by then...Great write

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:33:00 PM

So true Joseph..many thanks for the kind feedback.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 3/22/2019 7:54:00 PM

To feel the heart of another- so deeply, one would know its beat, even before a breath is taken. "What it wouldn't say, you certainly have" Exactly. Your thoughts move me. They always do. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/23/2019 3:32:00 PM

Glad you focused on the ending line..appreciate your kind feedback as always..enjoyed reading your comments..many thanks Brandy.