Vijay Pandit Poet Verse

If a Goodbye Echoes

If a goodbye echoes when you say hello 
And tears concealed admonish your smile
As life abandons you without hinting why,
Did you miss the sound of her silent cries?

If you need to ask how long does love last
You haven't heard the moan of her heart
Where quietly she hides grief of her wants
And quelling her passion, embraces doubts.

Her sadden vibes don't well-up your eyes
And the sound of her hurt just passes you by
As contemptuous voice ridicules her plight,

What it wouldn't say, you certainly have. 

March 22, 2019
HM: Strand select 5 contest by Brian Strand

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Valsa George February 2, 2022 at 6:25 AM Without drama and with no exaggeration you have unraveled the resentment in an aching heart, which for long suppressed its sobs. When her hurt look and moistened eyes didn't create any empathetic response in the lover, a hello from him may echo back as a goodbye from her. Powerful presentation of sentiments !

Gregory Richard Barden January 7, 2020 at 9:53 PM Sincere congratulations for your Honorable Mention in Brian's contest, Vijay - keep the ink flowing, my friend, and best wishes for a bountiful and healthy New Year. Blessings! :o)

Richard Lamoureux April 12, 2019 at 3:22 PM Congrats on being in the top 100 new poems!

Honestly J.T. April 5, 2019 at 11:27 PM A relationship that ends right after it starts; cool poem -JT

Deb Radke March 29, 2019 at 7:46 PM This poem catches me as it seems to reveal healing from a deep wound or does it? The first two stanzas seem to talk of grief. The last of contempt. The ever pulling opposite of emotions in the ending of a love? This is a favorite for me, Vijay. Really well written. Deb

Vickie Hurtt - Thayer March 29, 2019 at 10:33 AM Love the first verse...what a beautiful way to express love and loss. Vickie

Jennifer Proxenos March 29, 2019 at 1:27 AM Hi Vijay, Someone deserved your subtle response and you gave it so poetically and gracefully. Great poem Vijay, All the best and hugs, Jenny.

Eve Roper March 27, 2019 at 9:35 AM Vijay, very emotional and a very good write. Hugs Eve ~`* Vijay Pandit March 27, 2019 at 9:57 AM Thank you Eve.

Supraja Kannan March 27, 2019 at 6:42 AM Such a deep poetry. Enjoyed this emotional write. Vijay Pandit March 27, 2019 at 9:57 AM Thank you Supraja.

Andrea Dietrich March 26, 2019 at 6:14 PM wow, this is a very poignant one, Vijay. Very nicely done. Vijay Pandit March 27, 2019 at 9:57 AM Thank you Andrea.

Nette Onclaud March 25, 2019 at 3:17 PM vijay, thanks for parking on my page... where are you?.. huggs Vijay Pandit March 26, 2019 at 9:25 AM A new poem coming soon..thanks friend.

CayCay Godwin March 24, 2019 at 7:23 PM Fell instantly into total 'enthrall' with your write and its intensity kicked out of the ballpark on the last 2 lines. EXCELLENT. You poetically socked it to somebody, big time - impressive poem. All the best ... CayCay Vijay Pandit March 25, 2019 at 7:37 AM Such delight to read your feedback..much appreciate your visit..many thanks CayCay.

Allen Beilschmidt Sr. March 24, 2019 at 5:14 PM WoW! Excellent . So well written. Love the last line. It sums it all up. Vijay Pandit March 25, 2019 at 7:36 AM Many thanks Allen..much appreciate your visit and comments.

Chris Hagy March 24, 2019 at 3:48 PM Sad and eloquent Vijay...have a wonderful day :) Vijay Pandit March 25, 2019 at 7:36 AM Thank you Chris..much appreciate.

Silent One March 24, 2019 at 7:12 AM Nothing hurts like a sad goodbye.. your poem is full of sadness.. Vijay Pandit March 24, 2019 at 8:08 AM True..many thanks SO for your visit and comments.

Lawrence Sharp March 24, 2019 at 5:03 AM Painfully incisive, Vijay, very good write. Vijay Pandit March 24, 2019 at 8:08 AM Thank you my friend..appreciate your visit and comments.

M. L. Kiser March 23, 2019 at 8:05 PM Something to think about, indeed; well penned, thought provoking and a wonderful read. Vijay Pandit March 24, 2019 at 8:07 AM Much appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks, MLK.

Janice Canerdy March 23, 2019 at 12:21 PM This one is very deep, and very beautiful, Vijay! Janice Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:37 PM Happy to read your comments Janice..much appreciate your visit..many thanks.

Mystic Rose Rose March 23, 2019 at 10:59 AM Who truly knows the wells of the deep when it comes to another broken heart. Your poetry shows that you have a very high emotive soul that expresses it so well. Have a wonderful day dear Vij, xo Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:36 PM You said it well my friend..much appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks.

Joanna Daniel March 23, 2019 at 10:14 AM Deep and pain-filled poem, Vijay:) Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:35 PM Pain filled it is..many thanks Jo for your visit and comments.

Judy Ball March 23, 2019 at 10:09 AM WoW! Excellent advice and so well written. Love the last line. It sums it all up. A fine write. God Bless, JB Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:35 PM I am happy to read your feedback Judy..much appreciate..many thanks.

Sara Kendrick March 23, 2019 at 10:07 AM Interesting lines penned. I can see it is speaks of a deep relationship gone wrong. Thanks for dropping by. Sara Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:34 PM Yes it did go wrong..many thanks Sara for your visit and comments.

Arturo Michael March 23, 2019 at 6:36 AM Nice one... you had me thinking there...a life write... Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:33 PM Thank you Arturo..much appreciate.

Joseph May March 23, 2019 at 4:51 AM The first line says it well Vijay, love is long lost by then...Great write Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:33 PM So true Joseph..many thanks for the kind feedback.

Brandy Nicole March 22, 2019 at 7:54 PM To feel the heart of another- so deeply, one would know its beat, even before a breath is taken. "What it wouldn't say, you certainly have" Exactly. Your thoughts move me. They always do. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit March 23, 2019 at 3:32 PM Glad you focused on the ending line..appreciate your kind feedback as always..enjoyed reading your comments..many thanks Brandy.

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