Idyllic Haven-W

I listen on the beach to the cascading waves,
Slapping, tossing the sand pebbles,
Creating, swishing, swashing sounds,
I hear hissing, rustling sounds in the caves.

I see some gliding fishing boats everywhere,
The seagulls soaring, gliding in the air here,
On the horizon floating ships still further,
Surfers trying to get rides on the waves here.

I watch people running strolling and sunning,
The sun is to set on the horizon advancing,
With a promise to rise anew tomorrow,
Like the human ambitions and desires grow.

I notice the crabs scurry somewhere to hide,
The scooping pelicans with mouthful of fish alongside,
Water receding leaving the smooth bed of sand,
All sounds now receding to its minimum end.

Come, Grace, let us get away from the turmoil,
 It is the time for us to be in tranquility to coil?
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Twelfth Placement
Contest: Viva Vacation
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 6/11/2010 7:53:00 AM
Great imagery and I like especially the aliteration and assonace.Rgds Brian One for the favourites.
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Date: 6/7/2010 9:24:00 PM
Such powerful words. So touching.. Very creative write
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Date: 5/21/2010 5:52:00 AM
Congratulations DR on your win in the contest "Viva Vacation" sponsored by Linda-Marie. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/6/2010 5:25:00 PM
Congrats Dr. Ram on your 12th place win in my Viva Vacation contest.. an amazing write ..appreciate your support.. luv.. Linda-Marie
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Date: 5/1/2010 9:11:00 PM
Very nice write with all the sounds of the shore quite clear to me. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your comment on my poem. Caroline.
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Date: 5/1/2010 6:36:00 PM
Good use of rhyme and imagery to share your thoughts. I like how you use verbs to keep the lines moving. Nice one! Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Karen
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Date: 5/1/2010 5:43:00 PM
Dr. Ram, thank you. In your poem, I admire your challenging rhyme scheme. It is not easy to pull off, I know, believe me. Coil and turmoil are good! Regards, Gerard
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Date: 5/1/2010 4:58:00 PM
Nicely written. You take us there.
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Date: 4/30/2010 7:06:00 PM
I enjoyed the descriptiveness you whowed us about this beach! Luv, andrea
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Date: 4/30/2010 6:15:00 PM
You can visit St. Simon"s Island to coil in peace Carolyn.
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Date: 4/30/2010 5:34:00 PM
some good imagery here!
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Date: 4/30/2010 9:14:00 AM
very nice write enjoyed and thanks for your kind comments have a great day faleshia
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Date: 4/30/2010 8:03:00 AM
Lovely penned! I remember well those days near the ocean. Now I am far away form it but can still feel the fresh and cool breeze! Thank you for your comments and have a great weekend...Gert
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Date: 4/30/2010 1:10:00 AM
You paint a lovely picture with words.. love constance
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Date: 4/29/2010 10:32:00 PM
My wonderful images of summer, Dr. Ram, and I love the couplet at the end. If you find a place to "coil" in peace, please lead me there. This was a beautiful poem. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/29/2010 10:25:00 PM
THANK U ON MY POEM BOO, CAN I GO FISHIN WITH U? bUfFy
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Date: 4/29/2010 9:21:00 PM
got a lovely mental image! thank you!
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Date: 4/29/2010 6:06:00 AM
enjoyed reading!
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Date: 4/29/2010 5:32:00 AM
Great descriptive and expressive write that you have written today..Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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Date: 4/29/2010 4:52:00 AM
I really love this poem. It reminds me of the Bahamas where I use to visit my parents at their beloved condo. They lived in Wisconsin but also owned a condo in the Bahamas. Eating conch fritters, riding in the glass bottom boat, swimming in the ocean and more is so relaxing. Thanks for the memories - and I need a vaction or a short get-a-way. I thinkI need to look at some travel books.
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Date: 4/29/2010 4:42:00 AM
very refreshing at the end, have your self a nice one,..p.d.
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