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Ides of Gitchigumi

scorned sailor's warnings
turbines chewed November gales
writhing hawsers coil

swirl purple sundowns
cackling, taunting, demons deep
scaling mountain waves

last love message sealed
nod to comrade's final fate
flashes up ahead

Split Rock Lighthouse near
Superior's saving light
Davy's Locker scorned

loved ones exhale fear
raise a pint to brotherhood
distant nightmares sleep

Copyright © James Marshall Goff | Year Posted 2009

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Christuraj Alex Date: 2/8/2022 7:28:00 PM "distant nightmares sleep" - Beautiful. Congratulations! Login to Reply James Marshall Goff Date: 2/8/2022 7:43:00 PM Thanks Christuraj!

Brenda Chiri Date: 2/8/2022 7:11:00 PM James well deserved win! Congrats!:) Login to Reply James Marshall Goff Date: 2/8/2022 7:43:00 PM Thank you Brenda!

Daver Austin Date: 4/23/2009 2:07:00 PM Glad you steered me onto this one....excellent! The multiple is lots of fun...big excitement, lots of light, wind, wave, celebration. Love, daver Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 4/18/2009 2:52:00 PM wonderfully done my friend,i was gonna miss this,im glad i didn't my friend-charma Login to Reply

Sue Mason Date: 4/18/2009 9:44:00 AM AWESOME write here, James!! I've never tried multiple haiku's like this ... very creative and difficult !! Love the last stanza !! Login to Reply

David Smalling Date: 4/17/2009 1:30:00 PM swirl purple sundowns cackling, taunting, demons deep This verse is so original and so full with the intensity of fear, Jim, you have outdone yourself again, a wonderful write. Sorry that I am not souping as often as I want to. One love to you and yours Login to Reply

Arany P. Date: 4/17/2009 7:17:00 AM excellent haiku ... Jim! you can tell a beautiful story ... i love the second ... purple always attracts me! :) well written .. ~ Arany Login to Reply

Raul Moreno Date: 4/17/2009 2:57:00 AM Wonderful imagery, nice work James...Raul Login to Reply

Brian Strand Date: 4/17/2009 2:33:00 AM Especially liked the last one in this series Jim.Rgds Brian & thank for your welcome comments Login to Reply

Nadia Shahwan Date: 4/16/2009 11:58:00 AM Responding to your quest...if singing it as: su..pee..ri..ior saving light : 7 syllab. (correct). Pardon me. If you read it as su..per..ior saving light: sounds like 6 cylab. and so add the word bright....your haiku has a lively tune. You can keep it the way you composed it charmingly. All the best. Login to Reply

L'Nass Shango Date: 4/16/2009 11:32:00 AM The lighthouse is the miracle of all our stormy days ... you have prformed, brother, a magnificient telling worthy of men who spin yarns about the sea ... awesome write. Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 4/16/2009 10:56:00 AM Thank God they found the lighthouse, James. I go deep sea fishing and this reminded me of one night when I could only follow my compass for more than 20 miles through a storm, creeping along at about 3 miles an hour in waves 8-10 feet high. Brilliant writing! (Davy Jones has enough company - let him frown when one gets away.) Awesome work. Love, Carolyn Login to Reply

Nadia Shahwan Date: 4/16/2009 8:55:00 AM Beautiful indeed. Thank you for commenting my poem Tulips Sing. May I kindly suggest reintering this haiku as follows:....writhing hawser's coil (5cylab), and .....Superior's saving bright light (7 cylab). I wish you all the best and thank you for your sincere review. Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 4/16/2009 6:52:00 AM What a ride! The fear and excitement of the sea...and I love the third verse, the dire feeling of a final goodbye! Well done, James!~ Love, Carrie Login to Reply

Sharon Winter Date: 4/16/2009 5:36:00 AM Wow. Love them all but my fav is the second. Nice work. Love, Shar Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 4/16/2009 5:25:00 AM Now you're making me google again (poke) now that you made me work ...perhaps you'd take a pass at the above in present tense? see if it increases the anxiety, the adventure? Light & Love Login to Reply

Christopher Higgins Date: 4/16/2009 4:20:00 AM This is brilliantly done Jim..great read. Login to Reply