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Bare ...
She stood blinking,
Arms out like a crooked crucifix,
Dangling fingers, as if waiting for a ring.

Frozen flakes fell fat, and fatter,
From what was once scorched azure breath -
You'd think an eyelash could carry such burden,
Yet one Chantilly crystal proved dire ...

Lid, clamped and sealed with surety,
Fast-melting snow, a-mix with tear and trickling ...
No sooner had it reached her lip,
Than a gasp of sacred hopes, unspoken,

Scattered it to the bitter wind,
Turning it back to ice,
And a prayer ...
Murdered.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 10/18/2019 11:46:00 AM
An interesting write, dear Greg!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/21/2019 2:05:00 AM
Talk about too much information, lol ... sorry. ;o)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/19/2019 1:39:00 AM
(2) Why is she standing naked in the snow, and why in that pose? Why the tears and the offense to the snow on her eyelids? Why has she lost all hope? Why is there a freeze where it was once very hot? Why the dangling fingers? There IS a whole story there, but one for the reader to TRY to put together! Blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/19/2019 1:33:00 AM
(1) Thanks so much, Kim ... I love to write these "moments", where a picture is painted of something curious and weighty, yet the story that surrounds it, (before-and-after), is left up to the reader's imagination. I always have a clear context in my head, but try to shed that for the sake of leaving it ... open-ended. (continued)
Date: 10/18/2019 7:28:00 AM
Wow Greg, that was dark and chilling. Such a creative piece, I am impressed. Really cool.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 10/19/2019 1:30:00 AM
Oh, thank you so much, Chris, that means a lot to me ... blessings, My Friend! :-)