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Ice On My Brow

ice on my brow--
making Angels in the snow
with my best friend

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Matthew Anish

Date: 11/18/2011 9:40:00 AM

Heavenly haiku! Peace & Love Matthew Anisjh

Rosalyn Lampkin
Date: 11/18/2011 2:08:00 PM

Thanks Matthew for reading and commenting. Peace and Love to you as well. Rosalyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/17/2011 3:15:00 PM

this one was so sweet. Congrats on your win!

Rosalyn Lampkin
Date: 11/17/2011 8:03:00 PM

Andrea, I wasn't sure if it would be ranked but it was. thanks Rosalyn

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/17/2011 11:20:00 AM

Congratulations Rosalyn on your win in this Haiku contest of Debbie Guzzi. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/16/2011 3:09:00 AM

wow.. congrats... you did super.. i could never top.this... enjoyed..p.d.

Rosalyn Lampkin
Date: 11/16/2011 5:21:00 AM

first one ranked in the top 10....girlie, girl you know I am on top of the world with this.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/15/2011 9:46:00 AM

Congrad's on your win great progress really wonderful image! Made me want to play too! Light & Love

Rosalyn Lampkin
Date: 11/15/2011 10:29:00 AM

Thanks Debbie. I struggled with this one but I'm glad to know that it ws good enought to rank in the top 10 since it was my first. Rosalyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/9/2011 6:31:00 AM

Yes OK just you MUST use those two dashes after the word brow in line 1 [ice on my brow--]and in the title line you put the first line of the poem....

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 11/9/2011 6:31:00 AM

no capital [A] on [angels]

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/8/2011 3:10:00 PM

put line 3 back in 1st place and don't forget the -- after the word brow [when it becomes line 1 again] l & l

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/8/2011 7:18:00 AM

I am writing you because this has the making of a good haiku..print out the page from this link and review what you have written..line 1 could be a haiku it is 1 image..Line 2 could be a haiku it is a second image..this confusion is caused by omitting the -- which indicates the cut, please place it after line 1 http://sites.google.com/site/graceguts/essays/haiku-checklist

Rosalyn Lampkin
Date: 11/8/2011 10:31:00 AM

Debbie thanks for the advice....I'm determined to get this haiki poetry forum down to a science....

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/8/2011 7:18:00 AM

soup mail

Rosalyn Lampkin
Date: 11/8/2011 10:32:00 AM

Debbie I sent 2 message to your soup mail inbox. Again, thanks for guiding me with the haiku form of poetry. Rosalyn