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If you could only see the world the same way that I do, You would have to see that it has a crowded view. Bits and pieces of random things that to me seem inviting, Get included as elements into the play that I am writing. You complain that you’ve told things to me but I say I’ve never heard, While an old Twilight Zone has dialogue that I’ll remember word for word. And sometimes at night a smile will come across my face, As I run lines in my mind until I figure out the pace. Would it drive you nuts to know that there’s a stage inside my mind, Where actors are working diligently on a set that I’ve designed? And I know the worst part of it for you, the thing that you really dread, Is when our son will start to laugh as he watches cartoons in his head.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 11/8/2011 4:42:00 PM
VERY fluid and cool poetic thoughts!
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Date: 11/5/2011 12:52:00 AM
Awesome! It will always re-echo in my mind. Tor.
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Date: 10/26/2011 9:47:00 AM
you have a unique way of seeing things. I like how you portrayed them as a conversation with your wife. very realistic and awesome to picture a stage in your mind. your ending couplet is excellent - perfect for this story! the future awaits... :P
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Date: 10/24/2011 10:11:00 AM
Thanks a lot for your nice comment, your poetry is very inspired and expresive.
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Date: 10/23/2011 10:07:00 PM
spaekling runnnig commentaries that swim in your head.. eow, greeeat! :) huggs!
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 10/23/2011 10:08:00 PM
*sparkling*
Date: 10/23/2011 1:42:00 PM
Tony, those lines that run through your head are running through mine as well. Guess we get a lot of fragmented thoughts. Sometimes lines from a play I was in will come back to me with no provocation. I LOVE the last couplet!! Your son is only showing his creative imagination if he laughs at the "cartoons in his head." Like father, like son. Awesome! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/23/2011 6:42:00 AM
Very good write my friend....Michael
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