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I Won'T Cry

So you don’t love me,
I won’t cry, these are not tears.
So you don’t love me,
You  took your pleasure at will 
Laugh, it really meant nothing.





This is my first go at this form..suggestions?

Copyright © Barbara Gorelick | Year Posted 2008

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Joseph Spence Sr Date: 6/19/2010 2:54:00 PM This is excellent for a first try. Keep writing and you will be an expert on the subject soon. Congratulations on being featured. Great job! Joseph Login to Reply

Daver Austin Date: 6/19/2010 9:31:00 AM Super job, Barb. I don't think you capitalize the first lines of Haiku and Tanka. It really makes no difference to me. I like your poem. Love, daver Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 6/19/2010 5:55:00 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Barbara. Love, Carol Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 6/15/2010 6:53:00 AM Congrats. on your delightful poem being featured this week, Barbara. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 6/15/2010 6:52:00 AM Congrats. on your delightful poem being featured this week, Barbara. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

Janette Fisher Date: 6/14/2010 1:25:00 PM Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 6/14/2010 12:58:00 PM Congrats BG on your featured poem this week on the Soup... with luv.. Linda-Marie.. "Sweetheart" of Poetry Soup.,..... Login to Reply

Vince Suzadail Jr. Date: 6/13/2010 6:55:00 PM Congrats Barbara on the featured tanka. Vince Login to Reply

Date: 6/13/2010 4:52:00 PM The emotion comes through your words. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Way to go for your first time with this form! Keep that pen flowing. Karen Login to Reply

Daver Austin Date: 11/3/2008 4:32:00 AM This is super, Barbara, and wide open to interpretation. Looking forward to reading a lot more of your work. Thanks for reading mine. Love, daver Login to Reply

Michael Degenhardt Date: 11/2/2008 7:04:00 PM While I respect the choice not to cry in certain situations like that, I must also admit that crying is not a weakness but a strength, as it shows the heart of he or she who cries, it shows the vulberability and that isn't weakness, but an indication of trust and goodness, that which many of us aspire to have. This is a wonderful write, as it shows the subjects strength while being in perfect form >michael Login to Reply

Michael Jordan Date: 11/2/2008 6:55:00 PM Far as I can see you nailed it - The content really breaks my heart and I'm sorry that you have to go through that pain - My prayers are with you - God Bless Login to Reply