I wonder

Inspired by Silent One's Nothing shines endlessly. " yet, I wonder if there can be love without poetry" - Silent One 9 October 2024 Beneath the shadow of each petal of bougainvilleas and azaleas that adorn grandma's porch I trace my loneliness into the gossamer of light that bathes my shaded eyes yet, the shadow fades quickly before my hands could shape the paradigm I longed to paint in the unfinished canvas hiding under the old porch. The morning sun warms the paint as I dip my thirsty brush into the palette of endless quests I stop into nothingness~ Then, I begin to dance like a deaf ballerina moving my feet and hands into the rhythm of the passing clouds until the sky dissolves in darkness. I stop and wonder ~ if everything we see are greyscales of negative photography how could I paint you sans chiaroscuro?

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Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 12/31/2024 1:58:00 PM

I enjoyed reading this introspective poem, with its enchanting imagery, JCB. I loved the poem's shift into the contemplation of shades of darkness. Very best wishes. :)

Paul Callus

Date: 12/27/2024 1:45:00 PM

I love this excellent free verse offering, JcB. Technically it appeals to me, and the urge to read it more than once to savour its content could not be denied! ~ Regards // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 12/17/2024 9:13:00 PM

Thank you for posting such a lovely poem JC, and as to change the picture from greyscale to vivid colour, I Wish you and your family a Merry and Joyful Christmas filled with peace, laughter and most of all the gift of health. Hugs Maria

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/12/2024 6:47:00 PM

Through introspective contemplation of the origins and meaning of life, your poetry deftly depicts the wistful dance of light and darkness. JCB, this is really stunning. I am delighted to discover that you have posted such lovely poetry, and thanks for your visit and comments on my page.

John Read

Date: 11/6/2024 8:29:00 AM

Hi Jc, your poetry paints a intriguing picture, have a lovely evening.

Panagiota Romios

Date: 11/5/2024 5:45:00 PM

Hi JC, This is so awesome! I know not where to begin, I can say that some poetry seems like dead bones on a page! Yours brings life and memories, like soft gardenias, that carry mei into a magical waves of iimagery so well crafted A FAV !!Pangie

Beata Agustin

Date: 10/30/2024 8:19:00 PM

Thanks for sharing your talent, while exposing your lovely thoughts through your unique poetic style, my dear Kababayan. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 10/21/2024 11:52:00 PM

This is such an exquisite write dear JCB. Glad to see you posting such beautiful verse. ~ Ani

Jcb Brul
Date: 10/22/2024 6:08:00 AM

Hi Annie, thank you for dropping by and leaving a heart-warming feedback. Glad to see you back.

Tom Woody

Date: 10/17/2024 1:37:00 PM

Incredibly touching JCB. Have we crossed paths before? The garden, the painting, the dance of joy - good stuff in combination

Tom Woody
Date: 10/18/2024 5:05:00 AM

Haha I meant on Soup. My wife is Korean

Jcb Brul
Date: 10/17/2024 9:38:00 PM

Thank you Tom..I don't think our paths crossed before, I haven't been in your place, not unless you visited South Korea and Philippines for the past years.

Silent One

Date: 10/14/2024 12:35:00 PM

Your poem beautifully captures the melancholic interplay between light and shadow, using the speaker's solitary reflection to explore the nature of creation and existence. The opening image of bougainvilleas and azaleas adorning a grandmother's porch sets a scene filled with nostalgic warmth, yet the speaker quickly shifts to a feeling of isolation, tracing their loneliness through the gossamer light. The act of "tracing loneliness" into the light suggests an attempt to make sense of this emotion, yet the shadows fade too quickly for the speaker to fully grasp or shape it.

Jcb Brul
Date: 10/14/2024 8:23:00 PM

Thank you SO for your profound feedback. You put another dimension on my poem and teach me how can I organize my thoughts in the making to make a more vivid, solid and structured flow of imagery. I might recreate the forst stanza into another poem. You are an inspiration SO. Warm wishes.

Valsa George

Date: 10/13/2024 6:34:00 AM

Jez, you appear once in a while to mesmerize all with your beautiful poetry. I can feel how close you have been to your grandma. In many of your poems, your reminiscences of her appear. I am sure she was a lady of many parts. The garden she maintained must have been really beautiful. "Then, I begin to dance like a deaf ballerina moving my feet and hands into the rhythm of the passing clouds. " Can feel your body levitating in the beauty of the surroundings!

Jcb Brul
Date: 10/14/2024 8:21:00 PM

Dear Valsa, I'm glad you're back! Yes, my grandma's memory is immaculate, through my poems I want to feel her presence. Thank you dear friend for your heartwarming feedback. God bless you more.

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/11/2024 8:09:00 AM

Dear Jcb, the poignant, contemplative beauty of your poem touches my soul deeply. I adore your rich imagery that convey deep thoughts and feelings of loneliness and creativity and a longing for emotional connection. I loved the feeling of "grandma's porch", "palette of endless quests", "to dance like a deaf ballerina" "moving into the rhythm of the passing clouds" -wow! Spendid and mesmerizing poetry my dear friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jcb Brul
Date: 10/14/2024 8:17:00 PM

Thank you dear Susan for your inspiring feedback. It's always a pleasure to hear from you. Hugs.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/10/2024 1:03:00 PM

Absolutely beautiful and this whole stanza is WOW: The morning sun warms the paint as I dip my thirsty brush into the palette of endless quests I stop into nothingness~

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2024 4:18:00 PM

you are so sweet!

Jcb Brul
Date: 10/10/2024 5:02:00 PM

Thank you dear Andie. Your warm feedback is like the morning sun reviving me. Warm wishes!

Len Gasun

Date: 10/10/2024 12:31:00 AM

Wow! This is so amazing my dear poet friend Jcb. I dearly love and enjoyed immensely reading this superb poem of yours inspired by SO's line. It flows so well and the end stanza is captivating. Thanks a lot for sharing and your wonderful poetic talent. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Jcb Brul
Date: 10/10/2024 5:54:00 AM

Thank you, dear Len your uplifting comment made me smile. God bless you always. :)