I wish I had

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I wish I had contest 03/22/24

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Just nodded yes, when my ego had said no
Lost all consuming forces, simply let go
Met you halfway, instead of skirting the square 
Perhaps sat down, when you brought over a chair

Found quantum entanglement, not just sheeple 
Its herding force, far away from the steeple
Magnetism in both poles, pulling from all sides
Positive and negative, filling vast voids

Overcome the burden, in self surrender 
Let empathy conjoin, and love engender
Gone outside my comfort zone, where truth persists 
Quelled year old hate, encouraged alternate bliss 

Lived together, stop digging at empty space 
Found peace together, ending human disgrace 
Believed together, without losing mere face 
Came together, with all consuming embrace 

But then again, (I wish I had) lots of things 
Not just a pair of arms, but fully fledged wings 
I’d fly ‘cross Nepal, meet and kill the Buddha 
His words incanting, Shoulda Coulda Woulda!

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Robert Gorelick

Date: 3/25/2024 9:13:00 AM

David, Intrigued by your take on your response. As for me, plunging the depths of spiritual matters leaves me anxiously groping for answers. My lord--a thermos leaves me baffled; it keeps cold water cold and hot water hot. How does it know? Always enjoy your insights and search for understanding of what's so elusive for most of us. Best of luck. Robert

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/25/2024 10:03:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by Robert, I’m always on the search for understanding/enlightenment, I really don’t care where it comes from once it holds some valid truth, just like that thermos you mention, I believe answers can be found, but just not all under the one umbrella or roof, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 3/24/2024 5:06:00 PM

Wishing for more vigor and a little less malaise? Sometimes fallen Christians make the truest Christians, very Christian spirited for these are the holiest days. A break from your Rorschach test Monokus which leaves me seeing ink blots "I peered down into the deep abyss and saw myself peering back"--I Am Anaya lol. Beautiful entry for Unseeking Seekers contest, David

I Am Anaya
Date: 3/26/2024 3:32:00 PM

Aww!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/25/2024 10:05:00 AM

;)

I Am Anaya
Date: 3/25/2024 8:50:00 AM

Oh, I thought I made it up aha, not a genius after all. It's you being your lovely self. Loved your entry, cheers!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/25/2024 7:35:00 AM

Thanks Anaya, always difficult to know exactly what the Seeker is seeking in his contests, nevertheless I’m happy with this one, tried to stay within his inquiry prompt, without selling myself short, is that an ego thing or me just being me, I like that Rorschach description of my monokus, well you know what Nietzsche once said if you stare into the abyss long enough you’ll become the abyss, cheers David