I Surrender All

Hark! The birds are driving me crazy
so lazy, to get up and fly with them
whirling my lasso finger ‘round
their wings, pulling them into my heart
a dart straight through, you never know when
hits you between the eyes, spirals spin
heartbroken; and the birds are driving me wild
winsome and carefree in the sunny breeze
whilst i soak in my pity, my heart squeezed
not my fault
not my plunge
that old feeling
of responsibility
it lingers
i’m in its clutches
it’s eating me for lunch
it’s for the birds
their leftover crumbs
tweeting, “remember this feeling…”

i want to speedily run, rolled into a ball
like a bug, hide in a dark corner
it’s fun, to be on the web

the birdsong sweetly, softly, gently
stays, it stays, never rushing off
like falling leaves

it is not my rule
but i’m on the staff paper
the notes squeezing
not pleasing
i must pray
and hope
that it doesn’t all fall
apart
the birds have stopped
morning’s over
morning glory
in
surrender

Copyright © | Year Posted 2025



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Date: 4/8/2025 11:22:00 PM
"i want to speedily run, rolled into a ball like a bug, hide in a dark corner it’s fun, to be on the web" Wow, do I hear that! Wonderful and raw at the same time.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/9/2025 6:55:00 AM
Thank you, Paige!
Date: 4/8/2025 9:17:00 PM
The birds' twitter early in the morning awakens us from blissful slumber. We are hesitant to wake up into a day where responsibilities await. "i want to speedily run, rolled into a ball like a bug, hide in a dark corner it’s fun, to be on the web". Love these lines. We all sometimes take on an escapist stance. Great flow, dear Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/9/2025 6:55:00 AM
Perhaps we have to for a while then unroll and get back to it :)
Date: 4/4/2025 6:39:00 PM
Beautifully expressed in fluid word flow the essence of freedom. Nicely penned, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/5/2025 5:08:00 AM
Thank you, Subimal!
Date: 4/4/2025 12:07:00 PM
Good one Kim. Like how the rythym flows in this poem.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/5/2025 5:08:00 AM
Thank you, Oliver!
Date: 4/4/2025 10:30:00 AM
Love it! The flow of your words, how they flow like a river, of thoughts, and how descriptive it is truly made me connect to the lines youve articulated in such an effortless manner. Especially love “ i want to speedily run, rolled into a ball like a bug, hide in a dark corner it’s fun, to be on the web” hits the soul of the reader really! Pleasure reading your poem today! Hope you are doing well! Sending you light today and always
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/4/2025 11:22:00 AM
Thanks for the light! Blowing kisses and sending hugs! I appreciate you!
Date: 4/4/2025 10:18:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your "I Surrender All" write. Have a blessed/wonderful day writing away.............
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/4/2025 11:22:00 AM
Have a blessed day, Paula! Thank you!
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