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I s l i p p e d on a teardrop and landed in her arms. She never knew how much I needed her. I s l i p p e d in a puddle and I died in her soul. She never knew how much I needed her. Between yesterday’s old coffee and today's bright doom I broke in half. My heart slipped away into the hell of her death and my mind created LOST memories. So many moments of despair she held, and so many times of loneliness I lived. Beneath the darkness of the moon I drowned in a river created from her pain. It engulfed me into oblivion and I shall never be the same again. Sisters need each other and I needed her. Life seems over and death seems so FINAL. teardrops in her arms- woe brings rivers of d r o w n i n g DEATH by suicide I s l i p p e d on a teardrop and landed in her misery. She never knew how much I loved her. I s l i p p e d in a puddle and I died in her heart. She never knew how much I loved her. After the downpour of anguish I fell asleep. Nightmares of our final hug GOODBYE. If only I had held on longer maybe she would have felt more love from me. Maybe enough love to keep her alive. For she never realized how much her pain caused me heartache. She bled in sadness and I bleed in regret. No time to heal because healing is no more. Life seems dark and death seems so BLEAK. one final goodbye- not enough pure love from me two dead souls bleeding I s l i p p e d on a teardrop and landed in her remorse. She never knew how much I longed for her. I s l i p p e d in a puddle and I died in her essence. She never knew how much I longed for her. Before she was born she was already gone. A lifetime of sorrow and feeling different. It was hard for her to be a lesbian. Too hard. RIDICULED and damaged beyond repair. No more light at the end of her tunnel and the lessening of sunshine during her days. It’s depressing to think about what she felt her final moments of life. Her goodbye letter was awful. Full of pain and too much grief for me to read. I keep it in a journal tucked gently away. One day I will pull it out and read it again. Life seems wrong and death seems so BLACK. suffered from regret- too flawed and b r o k e n to heal sister’s forever ~She s l i p p e d on a teardrop and landed in her grave~ Date Written: June 21, 2016

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Date: 8/27/2019 12:04:00 PM
A lot of deep soul searching going on here. Your words are simple yet so powerful. And your emotion and pain wrap themselves around each word and I am left in awe and sympathetic to your internal struggles.
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Lu Loo
Date: 10/27/2019 11:58:00 AM
thank you Emile, I appreciate your kind words. Be blessed dear friend :)-luloo
Date: 9/21/2017 7:47:00 PM
What a POWERFUL poem: the imagery, the style, the rhythm, the content, the emotions evoked. Disturbing just as intended - Beautifully crafted.
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Date: 8/20/2019 9:57:00 AM
thank you sweet Line! sorry for late response :)-luloo
Date: 1/28/2017 11:00:00 PM
Dear Laura, You so beautifully captured the depth of your feelings from love to anguish. I feel privileged that you chose to share such deep and authentic feelings. Hugs to you, Kathy
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Date: 8/20/2019 9:57:00 AM
sorry for delayed response! thank you :)-luloo
Date: 11/28/2016 10:32:00 PM
This poem mad me email my sister to tell her I loved her even though I just talked to her for two hours. If you have/had them (a) sister(s) are always your first friends.
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Date: 12/28/2016 10:31:00 AM
thank you so much, this is a very hard time of year for me...be blessed and always call her when you want to tell her I love you, it could be your last...be blessed :) -luloo
Date: 10/16/2016 1:33:00 PM
laura, you know I love it, you always give me a beauty, congratulations on your win in my contest
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Date: 10/16/2016 4:13:00 PM
thank you sweet Broken Wings :)-luloo
Date: 10/15/2016 12:41:00 AM
big congrats on your win, lou.. what a marvelous haibun..huggs
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Date: 10/15/2016 12:29:00 PM
thank you sweet Nette :)-luloo
Date: 10/14/2016 7:18:00 PM
Congrats on your win, luloo. Such a beautiful way to express your deep grief... gentle hugs, Agnes
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Date: 10/15/2016 12:29:00 PM
thank you lovely Agnes :)-luloo
Date: 8/29/2016 1:20:00 AM
PS., Irony, Is `A Potent Teardrop *
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Date: 8/29/2016 1:16:00 AM
So very sad, powerful and touching. How many `Beautiful Hearts have left this wicked, wayward world for these many as this very reason, perhaps!? `We Will,` behold `Her Beauty ` As `Love`s Others Such As `She, Forever, `In Heaven!` ~ ...`Smile, *
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Date: 8/29/2016 10:35:00 AM
thank you Rachel very much for your kind words :)-luloo
Date: 7/20/2016 5:23:00 AM
Hi Laura, congratulations. Thank you for sharing your privatemail and raw emotions and doing so with skill
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Date: 7/23/2016 4:43:00 PM
thank you Jannie :)-luloo
Date: 7/12/2016 11:06:00 PM
I don't have an adj...Thank you!!!Justin
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Date: 7/13/2016 10:27:00 AM
thank yo Jai :)-luloo
Date: 7/8/2016 8:23:00 AM
Felt your words and emotions. Brilliant write. :-)
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Date: 7/13/2016 10:27:00 AM
many thanks Tom :)-luloo
Date: 7/6/2016 8:23:00 PM
Very nice
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Date: 7/13/2016 10:26:00 AM
thank you Michael :)-luloo
Date: 7/2/2016 3:19:00 PM
This touching haibun deserves to be recognized as POTW luloo! It expresses the depth of love and pain equally and as profoundly. Love should have no barriers. There is nothing greater on this earth than love. Beautifully written! I am so glad to see this also was a top winner. It moved me to tears.Blessings, Connie 7+ ; )
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Date: 7/3/2016 6:07:00 PM
awww thank you so much Connie, you are one of the sweetest ladies here :) Be blessed also :)-luloo
Date: 6/30/2016 1:59:00 PM
Great! This is wonderful, enjoyed it. Sunita :)
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/30/2016 5:31:00 PM
thank you Sunita :)-luloo
Date: 6/28/2016 12:02:00 PM
Congratulations on a wonderful write and win LuLoo. POTW honors is a nice bonus...
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Date: 6/28/2016 3:45:00 PM
thank you Charlie very much! :)-luloo
Date: 6/28/2016 10:00:00 AM
WOW! WOW! WONDERFUL..this is great..congratulations
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/6/2016 2:08:00 PM
I apologize, thank you Chrisdad, I must have been confused :)-luloo
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Date: 6/28/2016 10:44:00 AM
thank you Seeker very much, you have been really sweet to me...:)-luloo
Date: 6/27/2016 7:03:00 AM
This is heartbreaking yet so well crafted:) I love your haibuns:) They have a nice rhythm:) Double Congratulations on your top win and Poem of the Week:)
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/27/2016 10:19:00 AM
many thanks Jo :)-luloo
Date: 6/27/2016 12:09:00 AM
Breathtaking and beautiful! A 7 and Fave for me. Such pure emotions. Congrats on all your success with this Masterpiece!
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Date: 6/27/2016 3:05:00 AM
thank you very much Chantelle :)-luloo
Date: 6/26/2016 9:29:00 AM
Thank you for sharing your this beautiful eulogy - tremendous penmanship! Hung on every word - congrats on Poem of the Week! - Jesse
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Date: 6/26/2016 12:22:00 PM
many thanks Jesse for your kind words :)-luloo
Date: 6/26/2016 7:52:00 AM
Congrats!!! on win Laura...excellent job...great work my friend...god bless...^WW^
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/26/2016 12:22:00 PM
Winged Warrior, thank you very much for your kind words, you are very sweet :)-luloo
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cheryl harvey
Date: 6/26/2016 11:14:00 AM
Well done.. Absolutely beautiful.. God bless
Date: 6/25/2016 7:26:00 PM
such a heartbreaking poem LuLoo congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/26/2016 12:20:00 PM
thank you lady Jan :)-luloo
Date: 6/25/2016 6:55:00 PM
Congrats Laura to win the top place. Hugs
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Date: 6/25/2016 7:23:00 PM
thank you Anisha :)-luloo
Date: 6/25/2016 1:54:00 PM
Congratulation my lovely friend on your superb win with this very sad poem. Well done. A superb 7. My fav. too. Loved always, bl
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Date: 6/25/2016 7:22:00 PM
thank you BL :)-luloo
Date: 6/25/2016 10:10:00 AM
So sad. Congratulations on your win, Laura!
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Date: 6/25/2016 1:35:00 PM
Thank you Kim;)-luloo
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