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I Saw You Amongst the Wild Horses -Part 2-

But you—the wild one You were compulsive, fiery and inventive I had my share of the wild and free But you were molded from them—with insane beauty Despite our differences we remained together Perhaps you think I mean to save you—tame you But I merely long to contain the sun And hinder the pervasive burns So that in so doing, I may always keep you warm For cold wild shall destroy As warm wild shall invent Searing wild will one day save the world And then destroy it all the next Dear beloved one, I saw you amongst the wild horses I did not dare touch you Because I was afraid of Change But Change was a delight—an apple to your eye And I did not realize that Change was embedded in my very being So when you shyly approached me, I knew you were hungry I fed you ample laughter and music And soon I gained your highest respect Along with a thousand other mystical blessings I will not always remain by your side as if I am among you But perhaps I shall linger at a distance—level to your luminosity As words continue to flow, I shall slowly inch myself forward To be frank—you are the greatest companion in my world Hot or cold—seared or chilled You will always remain among the wild and free And that race is sadly. . . Slowly dwindling Tell me you shall never become me Never Change In honor of you, One day I will reach out my quivering hand And you will consume the Apple of Friendship Until then, Look beside you As was inevitable— I have changed for the better Because you are—and always will be My very greatest friend till the end -this Ode was meant to be altogether; I hope you enjoyed reading, and thank you-

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Date: 8/25/2014 9:24:00 PM
Yeah Laura, I more than enjoyed reading, this absolute masterpiece has spawned the magic of liberty devoted to beauty in me! The 1st verse is astonishing, the nuture, the fascination, the rival like suspicion, WOW! Thank you for this endearing "mystical blessing", this has my heart running, eyes sparkling! FAV!!!!! J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/25/2014 11:22:00 PM
To have /you/, the master poet of my dreams, favorite one of /my/ poems, now that has /my/ heart running and /my/ eyes sparkling. Sending you love and thanks for reading. ~Laura
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/25/2014 11:21:00 PM
Thank you so much Justin! You make me so happy, reading my older work! That means so much to me...this poem was written at a very difficult time, and its words often come back to me to tame and comfort my turmoil just a bit. I appreciate your visits wholeheartedly.
Date: 8/30/2013 6:18:00 PM
Fantastic write as always my friend. You are truly the master of words. With gracious being and thoughtful intelligence you pen the mighty word with delicate procedure and heartfelt love. This is a wonderful ode Many thanks always, Becca
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Date: 8/29/2013 12:27:00 AM
I very much enjoyed this very fine write. A story in a story from the heart. Beautiful! :o)
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Date: 8/17/2013 10:06:00 PM
Captivating write...I enjoyed this one... Ken...
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Date: 8/17/2013 12:22:00 AM
D allegorical take on wild horses is subliminally presentd superbly! Kudos. Pls do review my latest poem.
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Date: 8/16/2013 11:03:00 PM
Like handling a wild horse , you must never frighten the animal, the breaker just takes the fear of man away ... and trust remains...love you work here Laura....
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Date: 8/16/2013 10:36:00 PM
Awesome Laura,,,, I kept hearing the song Wild Horses by the Sundays ;} thank you much for reading and fav- ing my Fall From Grace, I always thought about angels falling as I looked at the widows in the church age 4 ;} fav-ing this.
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Date: 8/16/2013 9:04:00 PM
Whoa Daddy! that was amazing. What a great write. "Saw you amongst the wild horses" that line alone is worth a thousand pictures. You have done it again...brilliant writing. A true poet. If you haven't already you find a publisher. Yes it's that damn good. Always Kilmer
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Date: 8/16/2013 7:29:00 PM
You have an interesting story here, between the wild darkness and the friendship.. I sense a forbidden path. I always enjoy pondering lines~ I too love the WILD HEART. I can feel a sense of wonder and peace. Perhaps it the amazing title, and the lovely way you express loves good emotions. - I look forward to experiencing your other works... after reading this one my amazing poet friend... love love Linda
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