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I once dreamed a dream about four blossoming roses. As footprints trampled upon silent snow one died from a chilling childhood, frozen within dark chambers of the mind. Aspirations disappeared with migrating nightingales. As robins built their nests. Jaded, one died from wondering if you loved or not - all that remained was a trail of bleeding petals, silently decaying. As baby birds called for their mothers. One died from revealing its flaws to the sun, who unfaithfully, confided with wayfaring winds, who scattered suppressed secrets and shameful sins, upon partisan meadows - its petals reduced to ashes. As Autumn leaves descended upon rotten roses. Last rose died from isolated heartache, as raw rains refused to cease - there was no peace. Bird boxes were empty, feeders full of seed. Only thorns remained. Body of my garden is now concrete, no longer do roses bloom, no longer do I dream. Silent One Simple Musing 16 February 2019 An example for I dreamed a dream contest.

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Date: 12/17/2019 7:56:00 AM
Beauty and sorrow fused in a work of art, I congratulate you, Silent One.
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Date: 9/27/2019 1:57:00 PM
This is amazing poetry, looks like dreams can come true after all, Silent.
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Date: 5/20/2019 2:12:00 AM
Somewhere your dream came true but thankfully there are those who love the rose enough. A poem that is worthy of the name. Enjoyed the visit David in NZ
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Date: 3/13/2019 2:38:00 PM
A very poignant piece and extremely well thought out. The comparisons are exceptional because the roses are of course human hearts broken through deep betrayal. Some people get tough and coarse through time and others wonder what makes them this way. I think it's things like this. Very insightful read. Well Done my silent friend. Well Done. God Bless, JB
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Date: 3/8/2019 10:52:00 PM
Wait for the spring my friend.
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Date: 2/23/2019 12:44:00 PM
Cold are the metaphors, but oh so well written S O...
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Date: 2/22/2019 9:21:00 PM
Came back to listen to the song :) I like this version better than the one I listened too. This one is more powerful in emotions.
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Date: 2/21/2019 8:32:00 PM
I really enjoyed this one. I wish I had read it first, but my mind always goes to sonnets and iambic meter, which I love so much. I hope you like that I write different with sonnets. I like being different than other sonneteers!
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Date: 2/20/2019 5:09:00 PM
Good example. Thanks for the honor of placing in your contest. Sara
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Date: 2/20/2019 2:19:00 PM
Metaphorical perfection!! It replicates three way thisperson may have dealt with it by themselves. Intense and perfect!
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Date: 2/20/2019 12:09:00 PM
Wow! Just fantastic as usual. And I'm wondering, "Which rose am I?" It doesn't matter but you will always be the reddest rose with the sweetest perfume which lasts forever through your wonderful poetry dear ZZ. FAVED of course.
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Date: 2/19/2019 9:19:00 AM
So cruel reality. Deep darkness touches core of heart Silent soul has to bear. You are unique to compose any poem. Blessing.
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Date: 2/18/2019 3:31:00 PM
awwwhh.. i was no.31 on the entry list, then it closed... huggs, S.O...
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Date: 2/18/2019 10:45:00 AM
They only physically died for as your soul lives they shall live ethereally 4eva SO in a shattered unreal embodiment of silence. Kelli
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Date: 2/18/2019 9:21:00 AM
Such is life, S-1. Those four roses stand for the seasons of our lives, if we are lucky enough to experience them all! Regards // paul
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Date: 2/18/2019 5:34:00 AM
You sure know how to make me weep for broken dreams that much the rose into the ground, I love all your writes. They peel away at our defences so softly but effectively, that time stands in silence. xo
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Date: 2/18/2019 3:42:00 AM
Silent, wow how deep and dark, and quite wonderful, it's a winner if you could enter your contest for sure! My poem entered is a dream more beautiful than dark, oops, but hope you like it anyways ~
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Date: 2/17/2019 11:57:00 PM
Great words as always ....keep it up
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Date: 2/17/2019 6:14:00 PM
A fantastic dark poem, Silent One, and great imagery.. Hope I do it justice. Hugs eve
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Date: 2/17/2019 1:25:00 PM
- A dark and cruel dream, S.O. ... poetic beautifully written :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/16/2019 8:15:00 PM
Powerful lines; "who unfaithfully, confided with wayfaring winds, who scattered suppressed secrets and shameful sins,"; and imagery.
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Date: 2/16/2019 6:53:00 PM
A deep write Silent, each rose's demise holds a deep meaning...Well written..
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Date: 2/16/2019 4:51:00 PM
Soup Mail question when you get some time. Thanks
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Date: 2/16/2019 3:08:00 PM
Such a heartfelt write SO. Your poem depicts your true agonizing for nature that rots and alongside this rot, your dreams die! An incredible read. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 2/16/2019 12:38:00 PM
penned from the depths of a heart, S O... your rose seem to symbolize life's stages with a finality od a dream withering...remarkable example for your new challenge... glad to be part of your last challenge thanks and huggs
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