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I miss you so much

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Purely Fictional poem written for The Double Swap Poetry Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 07/08/25

Close friends don't know the pain I feel My broken heart can never heal Your sudden death was long ago The pain I feel, close friends don't know I can't forget your dying breath Was long ago your sudden death To think of you makes me upset Your dying breath I can't forget Alone each night, I feel so blue Makes me upset to think of you To laugh or smile does not feel right I feel so blue alone each night I'm depressed, there's no denial Does not feel right to laugh or smile I can't be bothered getting dressed There's no denial, I'm depressed

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Jack Horne

Date: 7/12/2025 10:30:00 AM

great entry for the contest, my friend - will read more next time (I'm trying to catch up with comments)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/12/2025 10:32:00 AM

Thanks Jack, i am posting a funny limerick soon:-) sending love and hugs to you and mum xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 7/12/2025 4:55:00 AM

Jan your words of pain and sorrow echo in the canyon of life, shared by so many! A wonderful Quatrain this is! Glad to see it's fiction!!! Happy Weekend xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 7/12/2025 5:56:00 AM

thanks sweet friend, I prefer to write humour but dig deep sometimes and go out of my comfort zone from time to time:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 7/11/2025 1:08:00 PM

Jan, the fact that you can write like this even though it's fiction does remind us that we get attached to people. Loss is tough to deal with for sure. Hope you are well and all is going as well as possible!!! Take care and smiles sent in your direction!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/12/2025 5:55:00 AM

Proof I'm not just a poop poet Duke and even when i write poop its work I produce myself lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/10/2025 10:24:00 AM

This tugs at the heart, Jan. So very hard to lose someone you love. This isn't an easy form but you made it look effortless. Big hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/12/2025 5:55:00 AM

Thanks Eileen, it took a while to write to get the switched line to make sense both ways and rhyme but I am pleased with the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/10/2025 10:19:00 AM

oh you did this form really well, Jan. Great topic too.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/12/2025 5:54:00 AM

thanks Andrea, its challenging but i enjoyed writing for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/9/2025 1:00:00 PM

Glad it is fictional. One of my good friends died a couple years ago. Glad I had a chance to sit with her and tell her I love(d) her. So important to not be afraid to tell your friends that. Hugs ~ Kim (love you ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2025 4:58:00 AM

aww Kim that must be so difficult seeing a loved one slipping away. yes its important to tell folk we love them - love you too sweet poet! hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/9/2025 12:04:00 PM

- A sad poem, Jan ... "I can't forget your dying breath" ... (when I read it ... I hear my father's last breath ... it sticks to my memory like glue ) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2025 4:57:00 AM

Thanks Anne-Lise its rare for me to delve down deep and sad but I do go out of my comfort zone from time to time and try my best for Joseph's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne Winter

Date: 7/9/2025 3:09:00 AM

A very sad poem, I can feel the pain through the words.... it's so painful to miss someone so much that it starts to hurt mentally and physically. I can feel it.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/9/2025 5:32:00 AM

Thanks Anne, thankfully it is pure fiction for me but i know other people can relate to the loneliness when their partner dies, I much prefer to write humour (I'm known as Queen of Poop and have published 2 books of poopy/bawdy poems on Amazon)but i do step out of my comfort zone from time to time and Joseph's contests always inspire me:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/9/2025 1:44:00 AM

Very sad beautiful poetry.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/9/2025 5:30:00 AM

Thanks Art, I can write a 'decent' poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh

Date: 7/8/2025 3:46:00 PM

A sad one for sure Jan, one that most people that endured a sudden death will fully relate to, the double swaps are so clever, unforced and feel natural, A great one for contest, cheers David

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2025 3:51:00 PM

Thanks David, it is a challenge to write this form, I think I've only written it for Joseph's contests. its nice to go out of my comfort zones and write sad poems for a change. hugs jan xx