Jan Allison Poet Quatrain

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Purely Fictional poem written for The Double Swap Poetry Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 07/08/25

 

 

 

I miss you so much

Close friends don't know the pain I feel
My broken heart can never heal
Your sudden death was long ago
The pain I feel, close friends don't know

I can't forget your dying breath
Was long ago your sudden death
To think of you makes me upset
Your dying breath I can't forget

Alone each night, I feel so blue
Makes me upset to think of you
To laugh or smile does not feel right
I feel so blue alone each night

I'm depressed, there's no denial
Does not feel right to laugh or smile
I can't be bothered getting dressed
There's no denial, I'm depressed

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Jerry T Curtis September 6, 2025 at 5:24 AM Jan This is so sad I had to make it into a song. So, with the magic of music, I could make sound less sad, hope you don't mind

Andrea Dietrich August 9, 2025 at 1:52 PM Way to go with this difficult form, Jan. Belated congrats.

Joseph May August 6, 2025 at 7:56 AM A touching verse Jan, Very nicely written, Congrats on your win in my contest

CayCay Godwin August 2, 2025 at 2:37 PM So emotive and beautiful, Jan, excellent writing. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Jack Horne July 12, 2025 at 10:30 AM great entry for the contest, my friend - will read more next time (I'm trying to catch up with comments) Jan Allison July 12, 2025 at 10:32 AM Thanks Jack, i am posting a funny limerick soon:-) sending love and hugs to you and mum xx

Mike Gentile July 12, 2025 at 4:55 AM Jan your words of pain and sorrow echo in the canyon of life, shared by so many! A wonderful Quatrain this is! Glad to see it's fiction!!! Happy Weekend xxoo Jan Allison July 12, 2025 at 5:56 AM thanks sweet friend, I prefer to write humour but dig deep sometimes and go out of my comfort zone from time to time:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort July 11, 2025 at 1:08 PM Jan, the fact that you can write like this even though it's fiction does remind us that we get attached to people. Loss is tough to deal with for sure. Hope you are well and all is going as well as possible!!! Take care and smiles sent in your direction!! Jan Allison July 12, 2025 at 5:55 AM Proof I'm not just a poop poet Duke and even when i write poop its work I produce myself lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian July 10, 2025 at 10:24 AM This tugs at the heart, Jan. So very hard to lose someone you love. This isn't an easy form but you made it look effortless. Big hugs Jan Allison July 12, 2025 at 5:55 AM Thanks Eileen, it took a while to write to get the switched line to make sense both ways and rhyme but I am pleased with the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich July 10, 2025 at 10:19 AM oh you did this form really well, Jan. Great topic too. Jan Allison July 12, 2025 at 5:54 AM thanks Andrea, its challenging but i enjoyed writing for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues July 9, 2025 at 1:00 PM Glad it is fictional. One of my good friends died a couple years ago. Glad I had a chance to sit with her and tell her I love(d) her. So important to not be afraid to tell your friends that. Hugs ~ Kim (love you ;) Jan Allison July 10, 2025 at 4:58 AM aww Kim that must be so difficult seeing a loved one slipping away. yes its important to tell folk we love them - love you too sweet poet! hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen July 9, 2025 at 12:04 PM - A sad poem, Jan ... "I can't forget your dying breath" ... (when I read it ... I hear my father's last breath ... it sticks to my memory like glue ) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs Jan Allison July 10, 2025 at 4:57 AM Thanks Anne-Lise its rare for me to delve down deep and sad but I do go out of my comfort zone from time to time and try my best for Joseph's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne Winter July 9, 2025 at 3:09 AM A very sad poem, I can feel the pain through the words.... it's so painful to miss someone so much that it starts to hurt mentally and physically. I can feel it. Jan Allison July 9, 2025 at 5:32 AM Thanks Anne, thankfully it is pure fiction for me but i know other people can relate to the loneliness when their partner dies, I much prefer to write humour (I'm known as Queen of Poop and have published 2 books of poopy/bawdy poems on Amazon)but i do step out of my comfort zone from time to time and Joseph's contests always inspire me:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso July 9, 2025 at 1:44 AM Very sad beautiful poetry. Jan Allison July 9, 2025 at 5:30 AM Thanks Art, I can write a 'decent' poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh July 8, 2025 at 3:46 PM A sad one for sure Jan, one that most people that endured a sudden death will fully relate to, the double swaps are so clever, unforced and feel natural, A great one for contest, cheers David Jan Allison July 8, 2025 at 3:51 PM Thanks David, it is a challenge to write this form, I think I've only written it for Joseph's contests. its nice to go out of my comfort zones and write sad poems for a change. hugs jan xx