I Know Your Poison

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"it is what it is i think it explains it's self.

I walk to work one day and saw you pass by. The way you were dressed it "caught my eye." I don't really know why. "Don't lie you dress like this because you want others to know you are a tease." That's ok i know your poison i know your disease. Keep on walking" because this is one man you will not bring to his knees." Because i want nothing to do with you your poison or your disease.

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Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 8/9/2011 1:26:00 AM

Interesting write, although, if you say something like, "caught my eye" and "don't like you dress(ing) like this," you do make it personal, which means you are affected somehow. Perhaps if you write, "I know why you dress the way you do/trying to draw attention to you/for you are a tease/always trying to bring a man down to his knees..." Just a suggestion. And you are right to stay away from that type of person. Thanks for sharing, and thank you for your comments on mine today. Caroline.

Craig Schaber
Date: 8/9/2011 4:58:00 PM

you r very welcome

Craig Schaber
Date: 8/9/2011 4:54:00 PM

thanks i will fix it cuz it does sound better that way thanks 4 letting me no. craig

Jack Ross Jr.

Date: 8/6/2011 10:51:00 PM

Excellent write mate...with love...old Jack

Craig Schaber
Date: 8/6/2011 10:52:00 PM

thanks jack