I Journeyed On

I walked along a well traveled dirt road,
intrigued by an old mill that caught my eye,
where flowing water of a river slowed.
My interest peaked as I stood nearby.

Intrigued by an old mill that caught my eye,
I sauntered nearer for a better look.
My interest peaked as I stood nearby,
captured as quickly as Queen takes a rook.

I sauntered nearer for a better look,
mesmerized by the cadence of the wheel,
captured as quickly as Queen takes a rook,
as it played a song in rhythmical peal.

Mesmerized by the cadence of the wheel,
my mind drifted 'neath grey skies for a while
as it played a song in rhythmical peal.
Journeying on, I wore an amused smile.

My mind drifted 'neath grey skies for a while,
where flowing water of a river slowed.
Journeying on, I wore an amused smile.
I walked along a well traveled dirt road.


N/A'd in Pen a Pantoum Contest
judged on 12.29.20
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Hamilton Avatar
January 16, 2021 at 12:18 PM
Not usually a fan of a Pantoum but this one is exceptional, congrats Jenna on your win!
Logan Avatar
January 17, 2021 at 8:51 AM
Thanks, but since I'm a fairly new member, I didnt have many poems from which to choose that fit your contest requirements.
Koplin Avatar
December 7, 2020 at 7:51 AM
Well done! I tried one of these but I just didn't have the mustard.
Logan Avatar
January 1, 2021 at 4:38 AM
It's not as difficult as you make it seem, Mark. It might work better with Mayo.
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