I Cry

Bud's smile lingers me Eternity lasts a while When I laugh, I cry

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/30/2012 7:28:00 PM

Mohammad, the haiku means a lot to me.. why so tears always follow... loving your haiku.. always~ PD

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/16/2009 12:45:00 PM

Beautiful. Should it read as: Bud's smile lingers me (5cyllab.), and... Eternity lasts a while (7cyllab.), and keep the 3rd line. All the best.

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 11/29/2008 12:27:00 PM

This takes place most of the time in life. There are times when we are overjoyed and laughter turns to tears. I can see the imagery clearly. Great job! ~Joseph

Ann Anderson

Date: 11/27/2008 11:50:00 AM

Hello Mohammad This touched me, and yes I smiled then somehow wanted to cry, very moved by this . Take care Ann.

Sara Lokken

Date: 11/19/2008 11:42:00 AM

A very deep and personal haiku, filled with beauty...Best wishes, Sara:)

Date: 11/18/2008 4:49:00 PM

Much to think about in just three lines. The last line says so much. Nice use of this concise form. Thank you for sharing it with us. Karen

Sharon Winter

Date: 11/11/2008 5:16:00 AM

Truly amazing three lines here. That last line is a killer. Excellent. Love, Shar

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 11/10/2008 4:33:00 PM

Oh man, what a powerful 3 lines - excellent expression, beautiful. love Kristin

Chitra Lakhera

Date: 11/10/2008 4:12:00 PM

Wow..this means so much. You write like those Urdu poets I've read so far. Wonderfully expressed. Take care always!! Love, Chitra

Deneen White

Date: 11/10/2008 3:01:00 PM

such a significance of meaning within this write, some times the less said the better, I love the last line, and thanks for your encouraging comments, hope that all is well with you, take care D-ncye

Michael Torres

Date: 11/10/2008 2:26:00 PM

Very nicely done Mohammad so true. Great metaphores. Beautiful creation of your's thank you for sharing Michael Torres