I Could Drown

In a boat
Rowing around the moat
Of my family’s latest castle

The one with towers and a flag with a tassel
And it really seems to me a lot of hassle
That the drawbridge is up and not down

The water’s very brown
I could drown

* based on Prince Magnus of Sweden, who nearly drowned during the construction of the castle drawbridge (another time, he allegedly leapt into the moat believing he saw a mermaid).

18th May, Jack Horne for Nette’s Trois par Huit a Bridge contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/21/2014 12:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Jack! Of course, I missed reading this earlier. Just love the humor! I must thank you for keeping in touch, my friend. Have a good weekend! xx Annalise
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Date: 6/6/2014 1:04:00 AM
wow, Jack, I am just now seeing your win with this one. It was so original. GREAT job and congrats.
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Date: 5/31/2014 1:05:00 PM
i idn't see that end line coming, jack.. impressively done!...warm congrats on your great win on my challenge.. huggs
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Date: 5/31/2014 5:19:00 AM
Congrats on thge win with this perfect Trois Par Huit, Jack
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Date: 5/29/2014 6:42:00 PM
JACK, Congratulations, in Nette's "TROIS PAR HUIT A BRIDGE contest." always~ Linda
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Date: 5/29/2014 3:40:00 PM
Interesting take on this topic, Jack! Enjoyable. Congrats on your win. // paul
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Date: 5/29/2014 4:57:00 AM
Way to go with this great winner...The bridge contest..That Prince might have been a little loony.....Sara
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Date: 5/28/2014 10:31:00 PM
A unique take to the contest Jack ,, wonderfully done ! congrats on fine win !
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Date: 5/28/2014 2:14:00 PM
Very funny..I liked it and didn't know about the Prince. He sounds like a fun guy..lol. Congrats on your different approach to the contest. BG
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Date: 5/19/2014 7:58:00 PM
I think they need a moat filter. Or a moat man.:)
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Date: 5/18/2014 5:06:00 PM
hahaha, the story of the guy who thought he saw a mermaid and almoiist drowned. I really liked your comical approach to this particular contest. WELL done, my friend.
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Date: 5/18/2014 2:53:00 PM
Wow, very clever and I love the way you got a bit of history into your poem. I'm always learning from you, my friend. Hope to see you in October and explore some castles. Funny, funny poem! Love you, Carolyn
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